Upgrade your account to a Community Supporter account and remove most of the site ads.

Reply to thread

Message: <blockquote data-quote="evileeyore" data-source="post: 236378" data-attributes="member: 1768">No problem in fact I expect a harsh review, after it it doesn't kill me it can only cripple me for life. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />  HehYes I like my nom de plum as well...Hmmm, I knew I was leaving something out...  The idea was the crew was supposed to be in on it.  But rather loyal, after all the Vampire isn't going to engage in combat at port often, and even less at ssea.  Also he treats his flunkies well.  I seem to have completely lost the NPC Personalty section I was going to write.  I looked on my copy and couldn't find it either.  I thought I had written it.  D'ohD'oh that was part of my original notes that somehow failed to be editted out.  This contest seemingly became harder the more I wrote...Once I had all this typed up the glaring part missing was the Hook.  All I had was the line "This is the hardest step".  I then began brainstorming.  I realized I had this case of 'costume jewelry" just tacked on to his cargo and decided it had to be woven in better...The Drow bit was in my notes and was explianed (in the missing NPC description section) as his method of disguise.  He can't operate during the day.  Neither can Drow.  Do people just automatically try to burst into a drows cabin and stake him in the heart.  Okay some groups will...  Well it was supposed to just be a disguise...   I plead insanity...As for the for the angry mob...  I was meaning that more as a method of introducing a plot element than a confrontation.  i thought it was weak and I was right.  If I was aiming to publish this I would have to rewrite it.AHHHHH, my beuatiful Alchemist Fire trap got lost in the Dragon's Hoard description...  NOOOOOO... Seems I dropped the ball.And yes our descriptions are different.  I lost the description section in which the jewelry was to be comment on as being for a costume ball...  Thus the expensive jewelry was intended to be used in the creation and worn with costumes...  Hmmm, sounds really weak that way too.I am really proud of the Dragon.  In fact originally the cargo was stolen by a group of pirates whose flagship was called "The Silver Dragon"...  The more I thought about the island setup, the more I realized the potential for a rightoues Dragon law enforcer of the seas.  In fact I like it so much I will definitely use it should I ever manage to run a game.The foppishness was more to be a personality thing... I have difficulty with creating fops...  It seems I dropped the ball here as well... D'ohThe Apparatus just fell into the story perfectly.  And he was supposed to have been slowly accumulating them over the years.  This didn't come out as well I had intended...  The number of Apparatus got inflated the more I considered the sheer scope of the project they were to be used in.  Should I ever rewrite this I will have to include a provisio for the DM to increase or decrease the number (within a set amount) based on if the PCs have access to Teleport... After when I thought about defeating this with my current group my Sorceror would have just t-ported out with the loot and then come back for his friends...The longer I worked on the entry the more I realized why I don't prewrite my scenarios to this level of detail.  Namely i start quickly running out of steam and a lot of crucial details (that exhist in a proto form in my mind) get left out.  For instance I aparently wrote an intire section in my head that failed to see the light of day.  And even though I reread this 4 times (with a good break in the middle) I still missed this fact...Lessons I've learned.  Don't dis someone elses efforts unless you have proven to do better.  Going back over the adventure with Rune's fine tooth comb I can see all the gaps my mind was filling in for me that some else wouldn't be able to see, because it was never written.  I also learned that 24 hours is a rough time frame, mostly because I blew my own 24 hour schedule...  I had the adventure in skeleton form on paper, and posted here I would finish it later that night.  Then I failed to have time that evening.  The following evening I jumped right onto the computer and discovered just how long it can take to type out 3+ pages.  And I still didn't get it up to a quality I could boast about..Over all I am proud of it (although it could use alot of polish).  It has a good amount of potential and with some fleshing out could lead to some good hooks down the road.PS:  I am suprised no one chastised me for the blatant Vampire name dropping... Okay I admit my Vampire Fop is no Angel, but I would have thought David Boreanis would have immediately come to mind... <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f61b.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":P" title="Stick out tongue    :P"  data-smilie="7"data-shortname=":P" /></blockquote>

Verification