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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Patryn of Elvenshae" data-source="post: 2317231" data-attributes="member: 23094">Nonamazing ...Wow.  That's a lot of adventure!I'll put some comments in a spoiler block, so CD doesn't read them while he's judging.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />[spoiler]There is absolutely no comparison between this round's entry and last round's.  To be completely honest, I didn't particularly care for your last entry - the general and his constant urgings seemed more like a railroad to me than a true plot device, and if you're going to set something in Eberron, you might as well use the lightning rail, instead!  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />That being said, I would have absolutely no qualms at all about taking this adventure and running with it.  It's a complete 180 in terms of presentation; the drive of the adventure is back in the PCs' hands, I love the rules / tidbits for Gather Information you've presented, and I particularly like the adventure hooks you've presented (in the form of 8 vignettes).I'm something of an Eberron fanboy at the moment.  I like the way you tied the setting specific material in, though I wish there could have been more.  However, this would be largely useless to someone not playing in Eberron, and its inclusion may even have hurt your entry.  So, in summation, I'm happy with it.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />The only thing I have a serious question about is how the hydra moves around underground.  If all the tunnels are as small as you say they are, and only the entrances fit medium-sized characters, how does a Huge-sized monster get around?Otherwise, that's a *fantastic* bit of writing.  Major props, mad ups, high fives, and all other signs of approbation unto you.  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin    :D"  data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />[/spoiler]</blockquote>

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