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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Morrus" data-source="post: 7891347" data-attributes="member: 1">I've switched to using Novlr to help organize my writing. I've also grouped the various mini-sections into larger chapters and fleshed them out a bit, and merged those two groups I was talking about. I feel that's working - the book feels stronger now. I've eight chapters drafted, although some of them are still fairly short (but I know what I have to write in them).Action scenes are something I always struggle with. They need to feel dynamic and exciting, without being a list of maneuvers. First (very rough) draft of an action scene. Action's definitely hard to write (at least for me). For now, I'm just getting to down so I can polish it later. This is an excerpt from Chapter 10.------------The hooded figure was striding through the crowd, intent on something. As they watched, he pulled his sword from its scabbard. Caitlin scanned ahead, and saw a pair of children - a boy and an older girl - seemingly oblivious to the killer’s approach.“It’s those two kids! They’re the target!” she called out.“That’s Aliva Jervasos! The Count’s daughter,” Aaric said.Manny started to push through the crowd, scattering people left and right. Caitlin drew her pistol, but there was no clear shot. Gredar Syko closed in on the two children, too fast. With no other option, Caitlin discharged her weapon into the air; the crowd reacted predictably, screaming and scrambling to get out of the way. The two children looked up, and saw Syko bearing down on them, his gleaming sword drawn, as Manny barreled through the crowd from a different direction. Looking round, somewhat panicked, the girl grabbed the younger boy, and, moments before the killer reached them, the two kids disappeared from sight. Syko stopped and looked round, and Caitlin took her chance - a shot, dead on target. The hooded killer simply stepped aside, calmly, and the shot missed. His intended victims gone, Syko fixed his eyes on Caitlin, and started walking toward her. She fired again, and again the killer shifted slightly, just enough that the bullet whizzed past him harmlessly. He continued to advance, and Caitlin fired again, and again, but impossibly every shot missed, the cloaked figure avoiding them as though he knew exactly where to be at the right time.At that moment, Manny burst out of the crowd behind Syko and threw himself at him, who again avoided the attack with an effortless twist. Manny sprawled on the floor.“He’s unkillable!” Aaric, standing with Caitlin, gasped.“Nobody’s unkillable.” Caitlin grimly reloaded. She aimed, and fired again. Another miss. Manny pulled himself to his feet. The area was clear now; most of the crowd had fled in terror, and a squad of spaceport security was running across the floor towards the confrontation.“naughty word, Caitlin,” Aaric panicked, and started backpedalling. She glanced at him, and then met Manny’s eyes. The security squad closed in.“We can’t be arrested,” Caitlin called to Manny. “Let’s go!” Manny nodded, and the three of them started backing away towards the exit. The security squad had their firearms drawn and were shouting orders to freeze, and Gredar Syko turned to face them, his sword ready.</blockquote>

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