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<blockquote data-quote="Janx" data-source="post: 5004388" data-attributes="member: 8835">to add a twist, the AI is Afi, and the AI called Jaime because she's still in love with him.The AI could be controlled by the corporation's evil VP, being used to analyze data streams and stock markets and manipulate news and public opinion polls, pushing the country to the brink of war so defense company stocks will increase in value.The AI was based on a neural net mapping of Afi, who was one of the researchers.&nbsp; She was killed when she discovered what was going on, but the AI still had an earlier impression, and turned to Jaime for help.&nbsp; She may not be fully aware of her condition.&nbsp; She may think she is trapped in a place where she has access to video feeds and such, but can't physically escape.&nbsp; The AI becomes jealous of the other woman who grows closer to Jaime, which causes her to subconciously trigger attacks in the systems she is wired to.Afi's bio would basically read she's a brilliant and beautiful PhD in neurology.&nbsp; She left Jaime to take a new position overseas.&nbsp;&nbsp; She still loves him, but the distance takes it's toll.&nbsp; Early on, she does the mapping experiment which puts an impression of her neural network into the computer.&nbsp; This image has stronger feelings for Jaime, than the real version.&nbsp; Time goes by, and Afi discovers that her neural network is being used to manipulate stocks, news and the country.&nbsp; She tries to go public and is killed.&nbsp; The AI senses this, and calls Jaime for help.&nbsp; This is where the protagonist comes in.Jaime meets the new woman, while snooping around the corporation, because she's been watching the company as well.I'd recommend changing Jaime's name.&nbsp; Adricks doesn't rolll off the tongue quite right,&nbsp; Jaime Addicks would be better, more natural.&nbsp; You might also consider a more spannish sounding&nbsp; last name, as Jaime (Hi-may) is generally a hispanic name (though not always, it could be pronounced Jay-mee).Anyway, that's my basic treatment of your story idea.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Janx, post: 5004388, member: 8835"] to add a twist, the AI is Afi, and the AI called Jaime because she's still in love with him. The AI could be controlled by the corporation's evil VP, being used to analyze data streams and stock markets and manipulate news and public opinion polls, pushing the country to the brink of war so defense company stocks will increase in value. The AI was based on a neural net mapping of Afi, who was one of the researchers. She was killed when she discovered what was going on, but the AI still had an earlier impression, and turned to Jaime for help. She may not be fully aware of her condition. She may think she is trapped in a place where she has access to video feeds and such, but can't physically escape. The AI becomes jealous of the other woman who grows closer to Jaime, which causes her to subconciously trigger attacks in the systems she is wired to. Afi's bio would basically read she's a brilliant and beautiful PhD in neurology. She left Jaime to take a new position overseas. She still loves him, but the distance takes it's toll. Early on, she does the mapping experiment which puts an impression of her neural network into the computer. This image has stronger feelings for Jaime, than the real version. Time goes by, and Afi discovers that her neural network is being used to manipulate stocks, news and the country. She tries to go public and is killed. The AI senses this, and calls Jaime for help. This is where the protagonist comes in. Jaime meets the new woman, while snooping around the corporation, because she's been watching the company as well. I'd recommend changing Jaime's name. Adricks doesn't rolll off the tongue quite right, Jaime Addicks would be better, more natural. You might also consider a more spannish sounding last name, as Jaime (Hi-may) is generally a hispanic name (though not always, it could be pronounced Jay-mee). Anyway, that's my basic treatment of your story idea. [/QUOTE]

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