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Message: <blockquote data-quote="IamTheTest" data-source="post: 3206382" data-attributes="member: 25399">Critique please.[sblock=My PC][code]Detlev ZecklinMale Human Crusader 1/Paladin 4/ Bone Knight 4/ Ruby Knight Vindicator 1LG Medium HumanoidInit +4;Senses Listen, SpotAura Courage (10 ft., allies +4 vs fear)Languages Common, Draconic, empathic link-----------------------------------------------------------------AC 22, touch 12, flat-footed 22hp 90 (10 HD); DR 3/bludgeoningImmune disease, fear, nonlethal damage, stunning, detect thoughts, discern lies, and any attempt to magically discern alignmentFort +15, Ref +9, Will +9-----------------------------------------------------------------Speed 20 ft. (4 squares) in +2 bonecraft full plate; base 30 ft.Melee holy ghost touch heavy flail +18/+13 melee (1d10+4/19-20/x2 +2d6 vs evil)Ranged mwk heavy crossbow +10/+5 ranged (1d10/19-20/x2)Base Atk +9; Grp +13Atk Options furious counterstrike, steely resolve 5Special Actions Rebuke Undead, Stances, ManueversPaladin Spells Prepared (CL 4th)1st-Divine Favorx2-----------------------------------------------------------------Maneuvers and Stances Known (IL 1st):Stances- Iron Guard's Glare, Martial SpiritStrikes- Vanguard Strike, Stone Bones, Douse the Flames, Leading the Attack, Charging MinotaurDisciplines: Devoted Spirit; Stone Dragon; White Raven-----------------------------------------------------------------Abilities Str 18, Dex 10, Con 14, Int 10, Wis 15, Cha 20SQ bone march, lay on hands (40 pts.), master of the white banner, share spells, summon skeletal steedFeats Power Attack, Cleave, Weapon Focus (heavy flail), Improved Initiative, Lightning ReflexesSkills Craft(armor) +6, Craft(weapon) +6, Hide +4 (-1 in armor), Intimidate +5 (+9 in armor), Knowledge(arcana) +6, Knowledge(religion) +8, Ride +8 (+3 in armor)Possessions +2 bonecraft full plate, holy ghost touch heavy flail, mwk heavy crossbow with 10 silver bolts and 20 bolts, gauntlets of ogre power, cloak of charisma +1, ring of sustenence, ring of mind shield, amulet of natural armor +2, heward's handy haversack, pouch containing 112 gp-----------------------------------------------------------------Bone March (Su) As a standard action, Detlev can assume control of up to 24 HD of animated undead from a willing caster, provided the caster and the undead are within 60 feet of him. He cannot control any individual undead creature with 4 or more HD.Lay on Hands (Su) Detlev's lay on hands ability heals undead as well as living creatures.Master of the White Banner (Su) Undead under Detlev's control and that are within 60 feet of him gain +3 turn resistance.-----------------------------------------------------------------Hook "Disciplined in life, disciplined in death."Detlev's Skeletal SteedHeavy Warhorse skeletonN Large undeadInit +6;Senses Listen +0, Spot +0Aura Courage (10 ft., allies +4 vs fear)Languages empathic link-----------------------------------------------------------------AC 19, touch 11, flat-footed 17hp 52 (8 HD); DR 5/bludgeoningImmune undead immunities, coldResist improved evasionFort +10, Ref +5, Will +6-----------------------------------------------------------------Speed 60 ft. (12 squares)Melee 2 Hooves +8 melee (1d6+5) and bite +3 melee (1d4+2)Base Atk +4; Grp +13-----------------------------------------------------------------AbilitiesStr 20, Dex 15, Con --, Int --, Wis 10, Cha 1SQ +3 turn resistance within 60 ft of Detlev (cannot be turned while serving as mount), undead traits.Feats Improved Initiative[/code][/sblock]rolls <a href="http://invisiblecastle.com/find.py?id=751705" target="_blank">http://invisiblecastle.com/find.py?id=751705</a><a href="http://invisiblecastle.com/find.py?id=751818" target="_blank">http://invisiblecastle.com/find.py?id=751818</a></blockquote>

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