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Message: <blockquote data-quote="EzekielRaiden" data-source="post: 9826316" data-attributes="member: 6790260">This is an interesting baseline concept--a dragon from an unusual parental union who pursues greater power--but as it stands, it's mostly a power fantasy without much depth to it. I think it would be really helpful to build robust answers to the following questions:How did this "rose gold" dragon's parents meet? Why did a red dragon and a silver dragon fall in love and produce a child? Did they show love and affection for their child, or were either (or both) of them bad parents?What did the dragon study first? Why were they drawn to that, as you put it, "path to power"? Given they pursued it, what did they feel was absent or lacking or incomplete, so that they would want to pursue other paths too? Or were they given some demonstration of another path's power, and desired to pursue it?Is the dragon ambitious for his own sake, or for some other reason? Does he value life, or does he see others' lives as tools for his use? Does he take more after one parent or the other, and if so, which and why--or, does he truly blend his parents' perspectives?How did he get all the way to intermediate deity power? That's an extremely strong starting point! I think it would be more productive to consider starting him out close to demi-god territory and building him up from there, but if you have a good story for why he's in this position, then roll with it.What kind of experience does he want? Why does he see godhood as "limiting"? What laws does he want to break, that he would be unable to break if he became a god? What things is he missing out on because he's choosing not to become a god proper? Are there others who wish he would choose to become a god, or perhaps those who are glad he chose not to become one?Perhaps this is delving too deep into the backstory side of things, since you said that would be added later. But, at least for me, what you've written is insufficient for me to really judge this properly. As it stands, it looks like an extremely rapid-pace power fantasy with little more depth than "ambitious unusual-hybrid character chasing incredible power became something Even Better Than Godhood", which isn't really very much to work with, leaving the idea...kind of thin other than "BIG POWER". But by that same token, I don't want to be too harsh because as you say there's backstory you haven't shared yet.</blockquote>

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