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Message: <blockquote data-quote="EzekielRaiden" data-source="post: 9827339" data-attributes="member: 6790260">Given the content of your posts here and prior, I don't think it would be particularly constructive to continue here. I think you would find more productive advice from writing-related discussion places, rather than a D&D-focused subforum. That is, most of what I've said thus far is writing advice, not really anything relating to D&D specifically at all. Sure, you've drawn inspiration from D&D, but other than telling the story of your dragon character in piecemeal, it doesn't really have much of anything to do with D&D stuff.All I can say, beyond the previous, is that I think you have put far too much focus on where this dragon ends up, too much focus on having Phenomenal Cosmic Power and being the greatest and best, too much focus on how he already did all these amazing things which made him different from anyone who came before. I don't think that focus is productive or going to lead you to very many interesting or engaging results. Instead, I think you should focus on the story of how the dragon obtained that power. The trials and tribulations he endured on his journey. The people he loved and lost, the places he visited, the lessons he learned. Getting taken down a peg and having to bounce back is a much more interesting story, for example, than being told that Awesome McCoolguy was really awesome this one time and did something nobody else before or since could do, that was super awesome to see happen.Even James Bond, who is absolutely an insanely over-the-top maximum-cool superspy (and Naval officer, and incredibly suave and compelling to his chosen partners, and, and, and...), has to endure hardship from time to time. Even Thor, the Bestest Boy in all of Norse myth, has times where he struggles, after a fashion, or endures things he would really rather not. It will be more interesting to write about, and more interesting for others to read about, the tale of how this dragon became something like a deity without any of the limitations of a deity.You clearly have a great deal of passion for this concept, and have spent a good amount of time putting pieces together. I think you've just focused too hard on piecing together the ending, and enjoying the feeling of imagining what it must be like to succeed in this way. I think it would be better--wiser, more constructive--to turn your thoughts to the beginning, and all the fumbles and foibles and mistakes littering the long road to final (indeed, ultimate) success. How did all this happen? What was the tumultuous and fraught arc which brought him to this nigh-impossible triumph? When did he do stupid or bad things, and have to live with his errors, or desperately try to fix them? Who hurt him along the way--and whom did he hurt along the way, especially people who didn't deserve it? Feeding ambition is always a difficult and dangerous thing, especially for an innately arrogant and self-assured creature like a dragon. (Dragons are definitely powerful and have plenty of things to boast about. They're also still extremely prone to hubris despite this.)</blockquote>

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