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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Fast Learner" data-source="post: 1174423" data-attributes="member: 649">You're looking for comments and critique so I'm going to be very specific about some things that I think would make the documents look cleaner and more attractive. Please accept all critique as constructive in intent.Modern Medicine: Nice layout overall, quite workable if you can keep the gray column full. For more of the 3D effect I suggest moving the light source up a bit, either to the upper-right or the upper-left so that the frame gets highlights and shadows on its upper and lower edges as well. Unless it's intended for on-screen reading only, the type size of the main text is too large... you could easily drop it a point or two. To indicate a new paragraph start you're using two things, both space above the paragraphs and a first line indent: either one is fine on its own, but both are unnecessary. For print there seems to be an excessive border on the inside and considerably insufficient on the outside, top, and bottom. To sum, a nice clean modern look that I feel just needs some tweaking. Gateway Magic: See my comments above on the 3D effect, margins, text size, and paragraph indicators. In the header area there's too much leading (linespacing) between the words "Modern" and "Awakenings" -- you'd get a nice balanced feel if the overall height of "Modern Awakenings" was roughly the same as the optical height of "Gateway Magic", and reducing the leading would help quite a bit in that regard. The box around the Forward is unnecessary -- the whole page is already boxed just fine and the header ("Forward") does a perfectly good job of setting the section off. The third layer of boxes is unnecessary as well (and the faux drop shadow is pretty unattractive in my opinion) -- the bold type does a fine job of setting those items off on its own.With such narrow columns and large font size the fully-justified text ends up with a lot of distracting "rivers" of whitespace (clumps of extra space between words that produce a distracting effect) -- squint a bit when you're looking at the page to see them very consciously. Normally I'd recommend a ragged-right format but with the modern feel you're going for I suggest reducing the type size (as above) a point or two (which it needs anyway) and the rivers should clear up quite a bit.Since you're using bold type to indicate heads and subheads it would probably be better to use italics to slightly emphasize words (like "was" in the lower part of the left column on page 3) -- italics don't needlessly draw the eye to the word when you're scanning the page but will still serve as emphasis when your'e reading the text.On page 4 the class features have a first line outdent effect that's not necessary and just eats space -- they'd look just fine flush left with the bolded first words. The callout box on page 4 ("Gateway Formula") would be cleaner with a light gray background instead of the heavy outline. If you'd prefer the outline I suggest reducing its thickness by at least half. Similarly the table below it would be just fine with no outline at all, though if you really want it then I suggest reducing it a fair bit as well. Where you are using first line indents alone to indicate new paragraphs (the spell descriptions) they're deeper than they need to be... about 2/3 of their existing depth would be neater looking.</blockquote>

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