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<blockquote data-quote="Klaus" data-source="post: 4828870" data-attributes="member: 607">I was thinking about the Revenants some more. While the fluff is good, the description of the race needs a bit more detail. Consider this sentence: &quot;A revenant's visage has a maskilike quality that can be disturbing to normal mortals&quot;. What does that even mean? And then, there's also the contradiction on the eyes description (most are black with a red pupil, there are other colors but they all have a red pupil, then most lack an iris and pupil and some glow).So here's my description for the revenants:Revenants are encased in a body not their own. No matter what race the revenant belonged to in its previous life, its spirit is now housed in a slim, pale body that is unnaturally resilient. Their eyes are usually solid black or white, and sometimes seem to glow with an eerie light when they are angered. Their hair ranges from white to raven black, and males can grow facial hair. Their hands and feet have harder skin, darkening to gray scales similar to a raven's, and their fingernails and toenails are matte black, again like a raven's talons.Most intriguing of all is a revenant's face. Their skin has been likened to a hand-sculpted porcelain mask, almost without wrinkles or expression lines and lacking the constant twitches of a mortal's face. Also, all revenants have a passing resemblance to one another, as if they were related. The fact that revenants bear a passing resemblance to most depictions of the Raven Queen is not lost on them.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Klaus, post: 4828870, member: 607"] I was thinking about the Revenants some more. While the fluff is good, the description of the race needs a bit more detail. Consider this sentence: "A revenant's visage has a maskilike quality that can be disturbing to normal mortals". What does that even mean? And then, there's also the contradiction on the eyes description (most are black with a red pupil, there are other colors but they all have a red pupil, then most lack an iris and pupil and some glow). So here's my description for the revenants: [I]Revenants are encased in a body not their own. No matter what race the revenant belonged to in its previous life, its spirit is now housed in a slim, pale body that is unnaturally resilient. Their eyes are usually solid black or white, and sometimes seem to glow with an eerie light when they are angered. Their hair ranges from white to raven black, and males can grow facial hair. Their hands and feet have harder skin, darkening to gray scales similar to a raven's, and their fingernails and toenails are matte black, again like a raven's talons. Most intriguing of all is a revenant's face. Their skin has been likened to a hand-sculpted porcelain mask, almost without wrinkles or expression lines and lacking the constant twitches of a mortal's face. Also, all revenants have a passing resemblance to one another, as if they were related. The fact that revenants bear a passing resemblance to most depictions of the Raven Queen is not lost on them.[/I] [/QUOTE]

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