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Message: <blockquote data-quote="trentonjoe" data-source="post: 302822" data-attributes="member: 304">I don't know how to do that cool cut and paste quote option so my notes are numbered from the above.Also, I went through and edited some of the grammar and spelling.  I hope you don't mind but I am a teacher.   IT is kinda second nature to me.  MAke sure I didn't change the meaning accidentally.I would highly reccomend that you do most of the writing in Word or a similar word proccessor.  Then Spell and grammar check.  It is not perfect but it will help alot. 1)  I will try to add the seas on my map.  Do you mind that the island are a little south of the equator?2) These are shamans of the god (Gildas?) of water right?  The main God?3) These could be developed into nice organizations and eventual PrCs.   YOu need to define their "jobs" more clearly though.  I don't quite understand.4) Good.  Are the ghost isalnds and wuha islands the same?5) I like that you made him an aristocrat.  Maybe give him some ability that has prolonged his life.  I imagine him as old and wise.6) Very good.7) Also very good.  Trentonjoe LOOOOVES heroes.  Seven seems great.  Maybe they can have an items that links them?  ALso is the army just for the main island or for all of them?8) Excellent this may be where the Wave Raiders get there wood.  This could make the two people unknowing allies.9) Very nice.10) It may be just me, nut I thought metal would be rare here.  I would limit metallic armors.  Maybe only the dwarves could have plate mail and the like.11) YOu just love that darn fang don't you <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />12) This is a vast improvemment over the first try.  Keep at it.  You are doing a great job.  Try to make these islands as  developed as possible before starting the next.  We have plenty of time.  I don't believe we have any publishers knocking on the door with deadlines yet!</blockquote>

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