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<blockquote data-quote="Cleon" data-source="post: 5422713" data-attributes="member: 57383">There's a few missing or extraneous words in the flavour text and one typo:&quot;This squat, broad rose bush boasts about twenty brllliant scarlet, each&quot; is presumably &quot;twenty brilliant scarlet blossoms&quot;.Plus, &quot;Firethorns gain their name from their ability to store heat from the&nbsp; sunlight, resulting in their the blossoms glowing like banked embers in&nbsp; the dark.&quot; has two thes that aren't needed.There's also a &quot;beign&quot; that should be &quot;being&quot;.There's also a few &quot;thats&quot; and a &quot;somehow&quot; which can be cut out without sacrificing meaning.Also they don't only radiate heat at night, since presumably they use stored heat for the fire damage of their Thorny Defence.Revising...&nbsp;This squat, broad rose bush boasts about twenty brilliant&nbsp; scarlet blossoms, each with an attendant thorn. There are no thorns on the main&nbsp; branches of the bush, nor are there any on the flower stems except near&nbsp; the bloom.&nbsp; The blossoms give off a distinctive, heady perfume.&nbsp;The firethorn, or sea rose, is a rare plant that only grows along&nbsp; tropical or subtropical sea coasts. The only place it is known to grow&nbsp; in abundance is on several isolated tropical islands.&nbsp; Firethorns can be&nbsp; found scattered in coastal seasonal grasslands but more commonly spread&nbsp; in clusters to form dense, matted carpets in tropical saltwater&nbsp; swamplands. &nbsp;Firethorns gain their name from their ability to absorb heat from sunlight, resulting in their blossoms glowing like banked embers in the dark. They store the&nbsp; excess warmth in their thorns until evening, then radiate the heat at night, leading some&nbsp; people to speculate that this heat exchange is necessary to&nbsp; their growth and propagation.&nbsp; A single firethorn bush radiates heat about&nbsp; equal to a small lantern, several bushes together may emit as&nbsp; much heat as a bonfire. Firethorns can also emit their stored heat in rapid bursts to burn creatures that disturb them.A typical firethorn grows to a radius of 4 feet.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Cleon, post: 5422713, member: 57383"] There's a few missing or extraneous words in the flavour text and one typo: "[I]This squat, broad rose bush boasts about twenty brllliant scarlet, each[/I]" is presumably "[I]twenty brilliant scarlet blossoms[/I]". Plus, "Firethorns gain their name from their ability to store heat from the sunlight, resulting in their the blossoms glowing like banked embers in the dark." has two thes that aren't needed. There's also a "beign" that should be "being". There's also a few "thats" and a "somehow" which can be cut out without sacrificing meaning. Also they don't only radiate heat at night, since presumably they use stored heat for the fire damage of their Thorny Defence. Revising... [I]This squat, broad rose bush boasts about twenty brilliant scarlet blossoms, each with an attendant thorn. There are no thorns on the main branches of the bush, nor are there any on the flower stems except near the bloom. The blossoms give off a distinctive, heady perfume.[/I] The firethorn, or sea rose, is a rare plant that only grows along tropical or subtropical sea coasts. The only place it is known to grow in abundance is on several isolated tropical islands. Firethorns can be found scattered in coastal seasonal grasslands but more commonly spread in clusters to form dense, matted carpets in tropical saltwater swamplands. Firethorns gain their name from their ability to absorb heat from sunlight, resulting in their blossoms glowing like banked embers in the dark. They store the excess warmth in their thorns until evening, then radiate the heat at night, leading some people to speculate that this heat exchange is necessary to their growth and propagation. A single firethorn bush radiates heat about equal to a small lantern, several bushes together may emit as much heat as a bonfire. Firethorns can also emit their stored heat in rapid bursts to burn creatures that disturb them. A typical firethorn grows to a radius of 4 feet. [/QUOTE]

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