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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Enkhidu" data-source="post: 2355558" data-attributes="member: 351">OK - story time. D'Shai and I went to high school together, and we both took our first creative writing course there, from the same teacher. As I remember, one of this teacher's hot-buttons was "voice" (and I know I went on to see this same topic beaten like a drum in college). And, to this day, D'Shai and I call each other on voice issues just about every post.For example, this post was one that originally lost the voice for Ashrem. My original draft for it (D'Shai and I take turns cranking out first drafts - usually I take dialogue heavy ones and he takes action heavy ones, but not always - besides, our styles have meshed enough that it gets difficult to figure out who wrote what sometimes) was a lot more confusing and bland as a result. But, after D'Shai called me on a bit of word chice here and some tone there, we suddenly had the Ashrem we (and from the sound of it, you) had come to expect.But, I do want to point out that while the actual words get changed from time to time (because we're dealing with 2+ year old events, here), the delivery is as close as we can get to the way these PC's come across at the table. For example, Pack's player actually does do the run-on-sentence-without-taking-a-breath-thing (which is funny, once you find out that Pack's player is also 6 and a half feet tall with the build of a OT).Anyway, we're glad that you like the dialogue, and want to say thanks for being patient while we get you through this background!</blockquote>

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