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Message: <blockquote data-quote="haiiro" data-source="post: 1697931" data-attributes="member: 1891">It's certainly too long for me -- I like more bite-sized updates, because then I can check in when I don't have a whole lot of time to spare. I often browse EN World in the morning before work, and a smaller update means I'll have time to read it -- a longer update means I'll wait until later on, maybe forget, and maybe not read it at all.When I first posted my SH, I went the same route that you did: nice big updates -- only in my case, they were large and infrequent. As a result, the SH never stayed on the front page long enough to spur commentary, and never gathered any readers. The few comments I got at the start mentioned the length as a negative.When I started it up again, re-edited and with shorter posts, it did much better (and I'm having a lot more fun with it as a result).Enough about the length, though. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f609.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=";)" title="Wink    ;)"  data-smilie="2"data-shortname=";)" />In a nutshell: you've started up a good Story Hour, and your writing really pops. I checked in when you first started it up, I took a look and was put off by the length and the initial lack of description (the latter of which came up in your feedback thread). I think you've gone back in and edited the first post to include a bit more detail about the characters -- it certainly seems that way, and I sunk into it a lot easier the second time around.In any case, the first post is now very solid -- I really like the Resident Evil tones, the snappy character dialogue, and the fact that I can really visualize the action as you describe it. That last one is something I look for in fiction, and you've done a very good job of it. Nice work! <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />I'll be checking back in as time permits, and it's probably worth mentioning that the "fictionalized, not just an account of the game" element doesn't bother me -- good reading is good reading.</blockquote>

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