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Message: <blockquote data-quote="BSF" data-source="post: 1639845" data-attributes="member: 13098">More comments are always good!  <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />Going back and forth from first person is tough to do and would probably be difficult to do as a short story.  Once you have the primary characters interacting, you almost have to show the scene twice, once from each perspective.  The point is to show how each character views the same circumstances as colored by their perceptions.  It can be very cumbersome.  This is a very valid concern!  I have one friend that hates it when I switch perspectives in my campaign narrations.  For her, it jars her out of the story.  It is something I do to cheat at my narratives so I can show my character personality, but also try to point out things in the environment that the character would not notice, but I think the reader would find interesting.  I have been working with third person immersive perspectives lately to see if I can find that happy middle where I can effectively do both.  I think that when you write first person that zooms back to third person it begins to feel more like a script for film than it does a book.  While you might be able to write something that you really enjoy reading, you might have a difficult time convincing an editor that the story should be published like that.  So, I would suggest that you set your expectations on what you want to do with the story, and consider several different perspectives.  Third Person with some level of immersion might give you the effect you are looking for while adhering to conventional writing rules.I'm not sure this would work the way you want it to, but I could be wrong.  It would be interesting to see the effort and try it out, but that might be a lot of energy spent with no satisfying result.</blockquote>

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