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Message: <blockquote data-quote="DM_Matt" data-source="post: 3690412" data-attributes="member: 1213">Is this an good concept?Max Rosenbaum, "The Debtor"Max Rosenbaum was raised in luxury, and his parents drilled into him day after day that he had America and capitalism to thank for that. He was taught to work hard for his money, his God, and his country, and oppose any who would threaten any of the above. His grandparents has fled the Soviet Union with nothing, and eventually built a massive defense corporation, which was left to his father and would eventually be left to him. True to his hypernationalist upbringing, and not having to worry much about his financial future, he joined the military after graduating from Harvard, becoming a SEAL and later moving to Naval Intelligence. He loved his job and his life, until one day, he found out it was all a fraud. He was called back from a mission in the field, and arrested. He was informed that his parents, Joel and Ettie Rosenbaum, were communist spies. Everything they had ever told him was a lie, a sham, a cover story. To make matters worse, he had had his guard down around them, and they managed to monitor his activities and steal classified information in his possession. While he was acquitted of all charges, he was dishonorably discharged from the military. His parents were not as lucky, and were executed for treason. He agreed with the sentence. Good men died because of them. Oppressive governments were strengthened because of them. He was shamed because of them.Though his views were tempered by both his parents and his country turning their backs on him, he still believed in his country, and wanted to prove that he was better man than his parents were. He vowed to redeem himself, not in the eyes of the public, but in his own eyes. He wanted to undo the injustice that his parents had unleashed upon the world. He managed to find their stash of illicit technology before the authorities, and still retained the family fortune, his military skills, and some of his contacts. After making a name for himself as a hero, he hopes to eventually unmask himself, confronting the public once and for all with the good he is really capable of doing.From that day on, he became a masked hero, calling himself The Debtor.  His costume is black and blue, and is form-fitting with a cape, a mask, a utility belt, and a very large gun slung across his chest.  His symbol, emblazoned on  his chest and right shoulder, is an unbalances scale of justice on a yellow shield.  On his left shoulder is an American flag, a remnant from his military days and a telltale clue that that is part of his background.Among his parents' technology, he found a set of prototypes for a Soldier of the Future Project.  One was a version of the OICW (Objective Individual Combat Weapon), a multipurpose futuristic rifle that the US Army ultimately shelved  due to the inability to overcome obstacles relating to weight and cost. It combined a rifle with a "smart" grenade launcher capable of programming munitions to detonate at certain places and times, laser targeting and viewfinding, and a firing computer.  This version is an energy weapon and grenade launcher, rather than a rifle and grenade launcher, and can be quickly reassembled into a number of different configurations.  It also allows the user to program the grenades and place them like bombs, though they need to retain radio contact with the firing computer to still work. The weapon is still very heavy, but the project also included nanofiber armor that not only protects the used but enhances his movements, making him stronger and faster, and thus quite able to wield the big gun effectively.  It can also make the user extremely strong and fast by drawing on the gun's power core and firing computer.  Additionally, it  contains a mask that filters out dangerous inhalants.The third device he almost always uses is a radar visor. [sblock]Name:  The DebtorQuote: "I'm repaying my debt to society, one criminal at a time."Concept: Disgraced Soldier Atoning For Parents' TreasonOccupation: Masked VigilanteReal Name: Max RosenbaumLegal Status: Dishonarably Discharged From NavyIdentity: SecretPlace of Birth: Arlington, VAMarital Status: SingleLiving Relatives: NoneHeight: 6 ft. 1 in.Weight: 240 lb.Eyes: GreenHair:  BrownMotivation: Justice, Guilt, PatriotismComplications: Reputation, Parent's may have sold the plans for the tech he uses to foreign governments or others, so that info is out there and there may be villains with similar technology who may be confused with him.Str    14Dex    14Con    24Int    10Wis    10Cha    1224ppFeats: Tough 3, Evasion 2, Elusive Target, Precise Shot 2, Well-Informed, Contacts, Attractive, All-Out Attack, Luck 2, Power Attack, Attack Focus (ranged) 3, Attack Specialization (OICW) 2, Move-by-Attack, Dodge Focus 6, Imp init, Equipment 129ppEquipment:Cell Phone (1 ep)Masterwork Laptop (2 ep)Handcuffs (1 ep)Commlink (1 ep)Skills:Bluff +13/+17att(12r)Diplomacy +7/+11att(6r)Gather Information +13 (12r) and see Contacts, Well-InformedComputers +12 (12r)Notice +12 (12r)Survival +5 (5r)Pilot +9 (7r)Sense Motive (10r)Swim +6 (4r), also see Swimming Power21ppPowers:SEAL "Powers" (Some feats and skills are from that, too)  :Speed 1 (Source: Training, Fitness) (1pp)Swimming 1 (Source: Training, Fitness)Quickness 2 (Limited: Physical Actions Only) (Source: Training, Fitness) (1pp)Super-Senses 1: Danger Senses (1pp) (Source: Training)Technology:Nanofiber Body Armor, Device 2 (8pp, Hard to Lose)  (Source: Technological)    Protection 2    Impervious Toughness 6    Enhanced Super-Strength 1OICW Mk. IV Array 18, (Weapon Summoning, Limited Dismissal)     18pp+5ap, 36 to spend    Assault Rifle: Blast 8, Autofire 2, Imp Crit 4    Sniper Rifle: Blast 10, Penetrating 8, Improved Crit 4, Improved Range 3, Incurable    Fatigue Grenade Fatigue 10, Area, Triggered 2, Sedation, Extended Range 1, Indirect 1, Ricochet 1    Explosive Granade: Blast 10, Area, Triggered 2, Extended Range 1, Indirect 1, Ricochet 1    Smoke Grenade: Obscure 10 (Visual, Scent, 3pp/rank), Triggered 2, Extended Range 1, Indirect 1 Ricochet 1    Electrical Impulse Enhancer (Taps OICW Power Core), Imp Crit 1 (Strike), Melee Focus 7,         Super-Strength 1, Super-Speed 2, Enhanced Strength 16Visor,  Gadget 1 (3pp)Extended Radio Sense/RadarGadgets (Disarmable) 2, Tech Array For Spy/Military Gear Only (12pp) 10 to spendExamples:Truly Universal Remote Control (Datalink 9, Machine Control)Bag of surveillance equipment from the core bookRemote control that summons sports car. (8 for the car, one for the remote feature)Super-Binocs:  Extended Sight 2, Darkvision 2, Penetrates Concealment 4, Counters Concealment 2SEAL & Tech Mixed:Immunity 2: No Need To Breathe (Combination of being able to hold his breath a really long time and a filtration system in  his mask)         Saves:Fort: +10 (3pp)Ref: +9 (7pp)Will: +8 (8pp)18ppCombat:Attack: +1 (2pp)Defense:  2 Def (4pp),[/sblock]</blockquote>

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