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<blockquote data-quote="Nellisir" data-source="post: 1843303" data-attributes="member: 70">Did Dragon write the ad or did you?&nbsp; I'm saying, avoid calender references at all when writing ads.&nbsp; They're only relevant for 1 month out of 12, at best.&nbsp; Now that it's November, your ad seems dated.It also sounds like you might have some issues to sort out with the salesperson at Dragon, if you don't know what ad you're paying for.Well, you spent two paragraphs describing an adventure that apparently isn't an adventure.&nbsp; I think you need to tighten up and refocus your advertising text.&nbsp; It doesn't clearly convey what you're selling, and if people aren't clear what you're selling, they aren't going to buy it.Anyways, I think Fester's kinda on the right track.&nbsp; You're $12,000 in, and seem to have very little idea where you're going or how to get there.&nbsp; Time to figure that out.CheersNell.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Nellisir, post: 1843303, member: 70"] Did Dragon write the ad or did you? I'm saying, avoid calender references at all when writing ads. They're only relevant for 1 month out of 12, at best. Now that it's November, your ad seems dated. It also sounds like you might have some issues to sort out with the salesperson at Dragon, if you don't know what ad you're paying for. Well, you spent two paragraphs describing an adventure that apparently isn't an adventure. I think you need to tighten up and refocus your advertising text. It doesn't clearly convey what you're selling, and if people aren't clear what you're selling, they aren't going to buy it. Anyways, I think Fester's kinda on the right track. You're $12,000 in, and seem to have very little idea where you're going or how to get there. Time to figure that out. Cheers Nell. [/QUOTE]

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