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<blockquote data-quote="Skade" data-source="post: 1213274" data-attributes="member: 3320">The Soundgarden reference was great. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile&nbsp; &nbsp; :)"&nbsp; data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />&nbsp; Aside from that its pretty good.&nbsp; Starting as you did with a combat is nice, especially for a Werewold chronicle.&nbsp; The characters are obviously not novices, and that power level seems a little excessive really, because their opponenets really stood no chance.&nbsp; That is the only problem I saw at all, and will probably be taken care of, as this was only the opening scene.&nbsp; Though the story focuses on Colin I think spending a little more time on the others might not be a bad idea.&nbsp; Standing Stones combat in particular would have made the opposition seem tougher, and brought a little more drama to the scene.&nbsp; Also, what happened to Shar'daraak?&nbsp; That is combat worthy of description certainly.So in other words, MORE!&nbsp; <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f600.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":D" title="Big grin&nbsp; &nbsp; :D"&nbsp; data-smilie="8"data-shortname=":D" />I'm eager to see more of Colin and his chivalry, which will certainly bring him trouble, and learn what the Black Spirals want with the girl</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Skade, post: 1213274, member: 3320"] The Soundgarden reference was great. :) Aside from that its pretty good. Starting as you did with a combat is nice, especially for a Werewold chronicle. The characters are obviously not novices, and that power level seems a little excessive really, because their opponenets really stood no chance. That is the only problem I saw at all, and will probably be taken care of, as this was only the opening scene. Though the story focuses on Colin I think spending a little more time on the others might not be a bad idea. Standing Stones combat in particular would have made the opposition seem tougher, and brought a little more drama to the scene. Also, what happened to Shar'daraak? That is combat worthy of description certainly. So in other words, MORE! :D I'm eager to see more of Colin and his chivalry, which will certainly bring him trouble, and learn what the Black Spirals want with the girl [/QUOTE]

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