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<blockquote data-quote="seasong" data-source="post: 426536" data-attributes="member: 5137">So, I'm sitting here, reading these submissions, and I notice a few things.1. You could turn those paragraphs into a list of bullets, and it would read about the same. Which likely means I wasted a lot of time worrying about &quot;flow&quot; and &quot;paragraph cohesion&quot; when I could have been packing in more details with short, hard sentences. My bad, worrying about prose when I should have been worrying about idea density <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f61b.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":p" title="Stick out tongue&nbsp; &nbsp; :p"&nbsp; data-smilie="7"data-shortname=":p" />.2. Show, Don't Tell. Instead of saying, &quot;there are lots of mage types&quot;, listed out a bunch of mage types. Pretty obvious, when it's looking out at me from the text.3. Golden Age. Yeah, yeah, this isn't the only criteria, but it does point out that my setting (while optimistic about what the heroes will do in the future) was perhaps a shade too dark for WotC. Especially when I could have set things a century previous (my setting was post-apocalyptic) and offered WotC thriving political centers, a sea-floating city, airships, powerful magics, etc.So, all in all, I don't feel too bad. There's some good reasons these settings were chosen over mine, and I can see how to improve any other submissions I make in the future. I may do a rewrite of my submission, just to see how it turns out <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile&nbsp; &nbsp; :)"&nbsp; data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="seasong, post: 426536, member: 5137"] So, I'm sitting here, reading these submissions, and I notice a few things. 1. You could turn those paragraphs into a list of bullets, and it would read about the same. Which likely means I wasted a lot of time worrying about "flow" and "paragraph cohesion" when I could have been packing in more details with short, hard sentences. My bad, worrying about prose when I should have been worrying about idea density :p. 2. Show, Don't Tell. Instead of saying, "there are lots of mage types", listed out a bunch of mage types. Pretty obvious, when it's looking out at me from the text. 3. Golden Age. Yeah, yeah, this isn't the only criteria, but it does point out that my setting (while optimistic about what the heroes will do in the future) was perhaps a shade too dark for WotC. Especially when I could have set things a century previous (my setting was post-apocalyptic) and offered WotC thriving political centers, a sea-floating city, airships, powerful magics, etc. So, all in all, I don't feel too bad. There's some good reasons these settings were chosen over mine, and I can see how to improve any other submissions I make in the future. I may do a rewrite of my submission, just to see how it turns out :). [/QUOTE]

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