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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Rystil Arden" data-source="post: 3367370" data-attributes="member: 29014">Interesting stuff, Fenris.  And there's some stuff that doesn't work, but this is my fault for being underspecific (guessing worked well for you when I did this for Scandaj--you had much of it basically dead-on except for references to deities).  Sancirce is a typical utopia/dystopia set-up such that some of your details don't fit completely--specifically, because of the prevalence and exploitation of the Vildri and a charity-loving church-based government, all Sacra can live a comfortable life.  Those who steal do so to gain access to luxuries--they are considered guilty of the sin of Greed and treated accordingly.  If by some strange mishap someone was actually forced to steal to survive (which would be a fluke), he or she would be absolved of the crime after repenting and then they'd be sure to make sure he or she didn't fall through the cracks again like that.  If you want to be systematically oppressed and treated like refuse, a Vildri is the ticket to that. You did nail the fact that men can't hold the highest positions in the church, but they still do hold some positions of authority.  Still, a jealous male might burn at the thought of the inequitable treatment--the explanation given is that Circe is a goddess who created women in her image and men to be their companions, so thus women are closer to Circe because they share her form and gender.Now that I've said that, though--you know the end part with the fire and deciding he owes someone--he just doesn't know whom, then listing the deity of "NOT Circe"?  That part is awesome!  It fits in an interesting way with something else--I definitely wouldn't change it.</blockquote>

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