Ceramic DM- The Renewal ( Final judgement posted)

[Eeralai]

Eeralai, I don't think your story was broken. I don't much like that genre and I did enjoy your story.

Thanks, Mythago. That makes me feel good. Perhaps we will cross typos again in the distant future. But I think BSF is itching to play after missing two competitions in a row.

 

[Maldur]

Judgement for orchid blossom vs. FireLance send.

You are making this harder on me, damn good stories

 

[FireLance]

I just wish there was more to the ending. It is a really strong story that gets tied together in what seems to be a rush.

Ultimately, I don’t find the plot of the story or the resolution to be
tremendously satisfying. It seems driven by the pictures to a great extent,
and that’s always a tough barrier to get over.

Thanks to the judges for the comments, and my apologies that I took so long to get round to saying so!

I have to admit that the ending of my story was a little rushed. It is a particular weakness for me. I think part of the problem was that I was playing around with too many themes: the horror of war, the protagonist's growing understanding and appreciation of her uncle, and the uses of illusion.

The bit about "the spells that won the War" (fly and invisibility were specifically named) and the presence of an evoker was an obscure tribute to all invisible, flying, fireballing mages out there - may your DMs always be able to come up with new and interesting challenges.

 

[Piratecat]

I think part of the problem was that I was playing around with too many themes: the horror of war, the protagonist's growing understanding and appreciation of her uncle, and the uses of illusion.

It's tough to write about the horrors of war when you have the amusing image of retired familiars.

 

[alsih2o]

When soemone besides Thorod is ready, feel free to speak up.

 

[mythago]

Good to go.

 

[alsih2o]

Mythago Vs. Thorod Ashstaff

Semi-final round, time to get mean.

5 pics, 72 hours, 6000 word limit.

 

[Thorod Ashstaff]

Crackin' the knuckles, prayin' over the keyboard...

 

[BSF]

Thorod, to make that proper smacktalk you need a little more phrasing.

Crackin' the knuckles, prayin' that the ink from my opponent's veins is sufficient sacrifice to appease the mighty Muse.

Or something like that.

 

[alsih2o]

Bump cause we are expecting stories.

I just got an email, P-kitty has had a distraction, results soon.