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First Post
Lots of judgements in, will be spreading them through the afternoon.
P-kitty sent his belated Firelance Vs. NiTessine judgement:
Firelance Vs. NiTessine
Firelance:
I have mixed feelings about this story. That’s partially because I dislike
translating “gamespeak” directly over into fiction, especially fiction set
in the modern day. Call it “Iquid’s mystical replicator” and I’m fine, call
it “mirror image” and I’m immediately yanked out of the story and forced to
think of it in game terms. The story itself never completely grips me as a
result.
On the other hands, aspects of the story were both funny and creative. I
love the home for retired familiars, and I loved the picture use of the cat
and the knife. Picture use in general was good. I’m amused by the
meta-references to EN World – nice cat joke – but they didn’t skew my
judgment one way or the other.
Ultimately, I don’t find the plot of the story or the resolution to be
tremendously satisfying. It seems driven by the pictures to a great extent,
and that’s always a tough barrier to get over.
NiTessine:
It starts wonderfully. It ends with a dull, questioning thud.
I’m guessing that NiTessine ran out of time. Based on the first half, this
is a story that deserves to be lovingly spun out and crafted. Instead it
just gets odd and surreal. I think the quality of NiTessine’s writing is
slightly above Firelance’s in this case, but the story itself has no
resolution and isn’t complete. Likewise, the photo usage isn’t well
integrated.
Judgment goes to Firelance.
P-kitty sent his belated Firelance Vs. NiTessine judgement:
Firelance Vs. NiTessine
Firelance:
I have mixed feelings about this story. That’s partially because I dislike
translating “gamespeak” directly over into fiction, especially fiction set
in the modern day. Call it “Iquid’s mystical replicator” and I’m fine, call
it “mirror image” and I’m immediately yanked out of the story and forced to
think of it in game terms. The story itself never completely grips me as a
result.
On the other hands, aspects of the story were both funny and creative. I
love the home for retired familiars, and I loved the picture use of the cat
and the knife. Picture use in general was good. I’m amused by the
meta-references to EN World – nice cat joke – but they didn’t skew my
judgment one way or the other.
Ultimately, I don’t find the plot of the story or the resolution to be
tremendously satisfying. It seems driven by the pictures to a great extent,
and that’s always a tough barrier to get over.
NiTessine:
It starts wonderfully. It ends with a dull, questioning thud.
I’m guessing that NiTessine ran out of time. Based on the first half, this
is a story that deserves to be lovingly spun out and crafted. Instead it
just gets odd and surreal. I think the quality of NiTessine’s writing is
slightly above Firelance’s in this case, but the story itself has no
resolution and isn’t complete. Likewise, the photo usage isn’t well
integrated.
Judgment goes to Firelance.