Help with character background
Hi, I am a new player and I have made a character from the Jade kingdom. I would like your comments on my background and please feel free to correct me if I have made some incorrect assumptions about the Jade Kingdom.
Atreus D’torian was the fourth son of a wealthy Officer in Jade Kingdom, son of Creston D’torian, who was one of the many good men that fell in battle against the Oni. His mother, Electra, was a merchant’s daughter whom came from the capital. After his fathers death his family fled to the capital in search of shelter from the Oni. His grandfather, Gregory Wattson, took them in and cared for them. During that time Atreus functioned as the delivery boy for the merchant, while the rest of his brothers where drafted into the military to serve the Iron Generals descendants, in the fight against Oni.
One day, one of his father’s good friends from the army, Kalach, stopped by to visit him and asked his mother if she would give him permission to take the boy with him to be his personal assistant and scribe. His mother consented and Atreus was now off with Kalach.
Kalach was no ordinary military man; he was an intelligence officer for the army. Kalach told Atreus that he came to him to fulfil a promise he made to his father. He promised his father that he would at least make sure that one of his sons would have the means to survive this war, no matter the outcome.
With strict training Kalach teaches Atreus everything he knows about combat, subterfuge, language and poetry. Atreus learns that Kalach was once a poet, but due to the war and his abilities was called into service. The years go by and under the wing of Kalach, Atreus becomes a promising aspiring agent for the intelligence network and an excellent poet, but soon things take a drastic turn. On a mission, investigating strange activities in one of Jade Kingdoms regions, Kalach and Atreus find a magic figurine that portrays an Oni demon along with incriminating documents that proves that some of the Jade kingdoms noblemen are still secretly working with the Oni.
Kalach presents the evidence to his superiors and is shocked to find out, that he is being accused of forging the evidence. Kalach realizes that he has been betrayed and that his superior is somehow involved. He escapes out of imprisonment along with Atreus. They are forced to leave the country, but before they left the, Kalach stole back the evidence from his superior.
[FONT="]Now fugitives, Kalach sends Atreus with the documents to Daunton while he travels to Bacarte with the figurine to look up allies that might help them in exposing the noblemen involved. Now waiting in Daunton for his mentors return, Atreus must improve his skills before the time comes to face the shadow once more.[/FONT]
Yes, absolutely! It's been part of my idea from the start that when the adventure is done, I'll go through what I did to prepare it.
