I like it alot. The way the physical description of an inflict spell was handeled was really good, and I the interaction is excellent. I look foward to further developments.
I really really dislike the military guy now that I think it over. I was wondering if I could shoot for a younger brother of a Hoffman agent who got killed, and looking into his death got tangleded up with the Institute, and after that he skipped college and joined up with them. I was thinking...
Gotcha on the combat part. Just a quick question, since im not overly familar with Dark Matter. Does Hoffman employ actual wizard/acolytes/whatever? Are they in the setting?
Heres a possible idea:
A foward scout for the US Military. While he was scouting a possible threat in Africa, he witnessed the militants he was tracking perfom rituals that actualy worked, and called forth some sort of creature. High tailing it back to basecamp, he relised that the story would...