I don't believe you...
This can't be the first short story you have written... it's too good.
You have pictured a very angry man excellently. From the beginning, after I read the first paragraph in the story I felt the man's anger towards his enemy, his boldness towards his actions, and his...
The fighting scenes are definitely improving. I really liked how you descrived how Gilliam's fear turned to rage, and turned him into a killing berserker; it gave us a little more background on why he stopped being a knight...
Perhaps the battle scene became a little long when descriving each...