Commentary copied from other thread, and yes, I use that many smilies
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(ACK! Commentary to unjudged story! Deleted now, though)
Piratecat: First off, I am a big fan of your literary voice. So it comes as no big surprise that I totally loved your story! The only thing I thought when you incorporated "Snulap Kpogyk" the way you did was, "I'm not worthy!"
Also, the sarcastic narrator really drove me to laughter more than once. Whistling the tune to "Cheers", indeed
Macbeth: Excellent story! The "in Las Vegas" comments were cool, but I think I would have liked one or two less of them, especially since you repeated Dopamine
And the Ending... well, you know - what can I do when Sialia and PCat agree, expect agreeing as well?
I loved that the narrator (do we even get to know his/her gender?) tried to built an arc, and that there's a real flood pouring down then. Certainly shines a different light on Noah
Morpheus: The story was cool; I liked the switch between action and "play", but I think I would have liked it better if you'd put the flashbacks in italics or something. Also, I think the first two pics were throw-aways. What was their function in the story? I probably didn't get it, though
A good story, nevertheless. Poor marine!
ETA: Did you make up the poem from Unaussprechliche Kulte, or is it real?That was a great touch!
(ETA: Morpheus already answered that the quote was indeed a quote)
Carpedavid: I'm at a loss for words right now. Really, the story just blew me away. And a hopeful finish to boot! Great, great, great! Of course, I don't smoke, so that helped
As last time, I feel honored to have written a story among these great artists.
(ETA: And I will feel even more honored once I rule supreme
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