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<blockquote data-quote="Systole" data-source="post: 6019556" data-attributes="member: 93930">1. Double check your ability bonuses in the skills. Some of them don't look right.<s>2. What is &quot;NT gp&quot;?</s>3. Pathfinder of the Society is a Golarion trait and can't be used in LPF. You can put in a proposal for a lookalike trait, or pick a new one.4. Is Anya's family originally from Venza? It's not clear from the background, but you picked a Venzan deity.&nbsp;&nbsp;1 isn't a big deal. <s>2 should be cleaned up because it's not nice to your approvers.</s> 3 is a dealbreaker and needs to be changed prior to approval. 4 is just me being curious.&nbsp;Otherwise, I like the character and the backstory. And Daylily will be happy to have someone to talk to in his native tongue. Welcome to LPF.&nbsp;P.S. Jira'shae has roughly five or six times the swearwords of any other language. It's a very ... shall we say ... expressive language.&nbsp;&nbsp;EDIT: Okay, I figured out what NT is.&nbsp; Lifestyle just needs to be listed somewhere on the sheet is all.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Systole, post: 6019556, member: 93930"] 1. Double check your ability bonuses in the skills. Some of them don't look right. [s]2. What is "NT gp"?[/s] 3. Pathfinder of the Society is a Golarion trait and can't be used in LPF. You can put in a proposal for a lookalike trait, or pick a new one. 4. Is Anya's family originally from Venza? It's not clear from the background, but you picked a Venzan deity. 1 isn't a big deal. [s]2 should be cleaned up because it's not nice to your approvers.[/s] 3 is a dealbreaker and needs to be changed prior to approval. 4 is just me being curious. Otherwise, I like the character and the backstory. And Daylily will be happy to have someone to talk to in his native tongue. Welcome to LPF. P.S. Jira'shae has roughly five or six times the swearwords of any other language. It's a very ... shall we say ... [I]expressive[/I] language. EDIT: Okay, I figured out what NT is. Lifestyle just needs to be listed somewhere on the sheet is all. [/QUOTE]

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