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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Aura" data-source="post: 6186438" data-attributes="member: 6747658">Reviewing Kyreprift HimbalAll my usual disclaimers apply. I'm somewhat loathe to edit a character sheet directly. Any of my comments or critiques may, themselves, be incorrect. I'll try to do my best. etc.Stuff That Needs To Be Changed:* While still carrying his sack, I get the following changes: Flatfooted AC = 10, CMD = 12, may not use flurry of blows, may not use fast movement.Stuff That Could Be Changed:* Precise Shot applies to any ranged weapon, not just bows. Just in case you need to throw a dagger.Notation Issues and Typos:* The trait 'Rich Parents' is listed as Social in the APG. 'Background' or 'See Background' sounds more like a note to indicate the re-skinning of the trait. Alternatively, something like 'Extensive Savings From Job' or some sort could be used.* Seems to be a typo on the CMD line, WIS listed as 6 (should be 4) but the total is correct.* Seems to be a typo on the superscript of the Survival Kit (') that doesn't match the contents when listed out below (1).* The Survival Skill line could stand to have the +1 Trait Bonus noted and the split value for the masterwork kit listed as +9/+11 or some such.* Some sort of notation on what blunt arrows do in the Weapon Stats would be nice.* Items costing less than 1gp could be marked as not tracked (NT) or clarity.* Weight Chart could be noted as including backpack modifier.Comments:* I like Kyreprift in terms of taking a classic archetype (guide)  and depicting using a nontraditional class choice. Monk/Zen Archer has a lot of very appropriate abilities.* Good use of re-skinning going on in this character to fit the story. Non-traditional green eyes (for a dwarf) was a nice thematic touch.* Under Flurry, is the -2 penalty actually considered a Two Weapon Fighting (TWF) penalty? It's less important to a Zen Archer, who has no melee flurry, but I'm curious.* Word of the day: Bethought* The dwarf weight charts are freakishly high, it's hard to imagine them without the assumption dwarves are denser than normal.* I'm having a hard time imagining being alone fixing madness. Perhaps madness is too strong a word in the first place, and the frustration of 3 years of failure to get revenge just modified his goals. Alternatively, perhaps the madness didn't abate until he had something to live for outside revenge.* Wow, you have your future planned out.* I didn't know slow characters took a jump penalty. Makes sense, though.OK, so only one stamp delaying issue. A very solid submission. NOT QUITE YET</blockquote>

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