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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Aura" data-source="post: 6224783" data-attributes="member: 6747658">Reviewing HawkWelcome to LPF, Tailspinner. I'll be doing a non-judge review for you, which means you'll need one judge review to get your final approval. I don't directly fix your character sheet, with exception of obvious typos. And every now and then I'm just wrong on an issue; feel free to state your case if need be. Onward!Stuff That Needs Fixin':* Exactly what weapon and armor it is, under Equipment, doesn't seem to be stated outright. I assume Great Sword (from weapon section) and Chain Shirt (from general stats), but you'll want to clarify that.Stuff That Could be Changed:* You get one free regional language, such as High Landellian. BTW, 'common' is Low Landellian, so you already have that.* Unless you're really after the Acrobatics roll, I recommend Fleet of Foot over Sure Footed for halflings. And I think a 40' move halfling is funny.Notation Issues and Typos:* The adjustment for WIS was stated at -1, even though everything else indicates +0 to be correct. Fixed.* You'll want to note the nature of misc modifiers, like from size, instead of leaving it 'misc'. This happens in Combat Stats, Weapon Stats and Skills.* The mechanics for the Rage Class Feature seems missing.* I'd personally include the stat modifiers even for skills that cannot be used untrained, particularly since they can be conditionally used untrained, such as some Knowledge skills. Wholly deleting such skills is also alright; at least you'll have no erroneous information on the character sheet in such a situation.* Not that it matters that much, but feel free to state the unrounded weight of your armor at 12.5 pounds. It will let you carry more, later on. There are many items on the equipment list that are fractionally accounted already, so this is not out of line.* Similarly, it's worth fractionally accounting breakpoints in carrying capacity: 43.5 / 87 / 131.25Comments:* Nothing like a good, simple, name for people to remember you by. I am a protagonist of that school of thought.* Halflings. Everyone loves halflings. Strangely, I don't play one, though.* This said, being a Halfling is really costing you. Not only all the traditional ways, but you are getting one of your stat bonuses in a dump stat and a penalty in a primary stat. The same array can be purchased on a human, half elf or half orc for 18 points. This isn't saying 'don't be a halfling', but, at lest, 'make sure it's what you really want.'* Clothing, armor, weapon. Done shopping, zero change. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />* Your background infers a significant and rather recent event in Venza. Not that such a thing is out of line in a living world built up by many people, but it's worth noting. Ask a judge if anything special is to be done in this case.* Roleplayers, as a group, are hard on parents in backgrounds. I blame Bambi.OK, NOT YET, just a little stuff I'd like to see and a number of things to consider, and we'll get you approved.</blockquote>

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