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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Aura" data-source="post: 6224800" data-attributes="member: 6747658">Reviewing Doren KaneWelcome to LPF, Rathan. I'll non-judge review your character. Assuming you pass, you'll then only need one judge approval to be ready for play. I only edit your sheet for typos, the rest is suggestions for you to go edit. And I sometimes make mistakes--feel free to point out if you think I am in error. As for Doren...Stuff That Needs Fixin':* Your traits are not stated. They are nice little benefits that you would probably want to have.* It seems you missed your Skilled racial feature in your skill point count. You get one more point.* The ACP for your armor and shield seems to have been omitted on ACP-effected skills. I get -4 for your armor/shield.* Skills that can only be used trained require a rank (skill point) to be added to activate them. Simply being a class skill, in of itself, doesn't do that. So apparently have some skills that look like they are usable, but really are not. Similarly, other skills which are usable untrained are not noted. A fair amount of editing in the skills section is needed, if you have any questions I'll happily answer them. Alternately, I can do my best to fix up the section, if you like.* Your movement should be reduced to 20' due to encumberance.* 20 sling bullets only costs 2 sp.Stuff That Could be Changed:* You have bonus languages you can take. One for INT, and one regional language, such as High Landellian, that everyone can have if they like. Common is Low Landellian, so you effectively already have that. (Low Landellian is also the primary language of Tritower, where your goddess' center of worship is.)* You have a WIS of 14. Nothing wrong with that, but I thought I'd mention CHA is the casting stat for Paladins, unlike DnD 3.0/3.5. So you have a stat you can farm out of if you were thinking you needed it for spells.Notation and Typos:* In skills, 'CS' is the generally understood column for the class skill bonus. You can move the +3 out of Misc to that spot for clarity.* Racial Features: You seemingly forgot to add Skilled and Bonus Feat to this section* I like explicitly noting the encumberance level ("Medium Encumberance") that results from what you are carrying, but it's not required.* Maintaining coin types in finances is rather difficult to do clearly and without mistakes. The 10 gold you used to 'make change' from your silver and copper expenditures virtually disappears, even if the final result is correct. I recommend using fractional accounting when totaling columns. (I get 139.12 gp spent including the sling bullet expenditure noted above.)Comments:* I'm a fan of classic-style characters, which Doren seems to fit.* The high-AC paladin using lay on hands to keep himself going (as a free action) seems to be a rather viable character type.In short, NOT YET, there are a number of mechanical issues that need to be resolved. However, it's all fixable.</blockquote>

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