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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Aura" data-source="post: 6252846" data-attributes="member: 6747658">Reviewing Dunkel MetzgereiOhboy. First new character in weeks. (They seem to come in waves, oddly enough.) All the usual applies: This is a non-judge review. As such, I don't generally edit your character sheet, but rather point out problems and make suggestions. And I sometimes make mistakes--feel free to ask about my critiques, I might be in err. Onward!Overview: A number of small issues, most of which fixing is in your favor. And a bit of conceptual clarification, particular with Rogar.Stuff That Needs Fixin':* I get Gold Spent = 106.2. I think you have 3 gold coming to you.* Even though your hit die rolling method is max-2, remember everyone gets max at first level. So I think you have 10 hit points, not just 8.* I'm unclear where you took your Favored Class Bonus. It's listed in skill points, but didn't get added in, leaving you one short. (See comments for another FC thought.)* A number of skills, particularly Cha skills, seem to have the wrong value listed in ability (and thus, total). Bluff, Disguise, Intimidate and Perform (All Cha) should be 1 from ability, and +1 total. Swim (Str) should be 2 ability, -4 total.Stuff That Could Be Changed:* You mention you're from a far away land. It's worth noting where, if possible. Adds character and lets you choose an additional regional language.* Looks like your deity (Rogar) is largely undefined. The most notable previous worshipper was a fighter, so that is not surprising. Adding some detail would sketch out which domains are allowed by those that follow in your footsteps, and which weapon is considered the deity's weapon.* Speaking of domains, you may wish to look at the Ferocity domain, a subdomain of Strength. Because it's level 1 ability can be done any time you attack, instead of taking an action, you'll use it a lot more.* Your ability listing on skills which need to be trained to be used could be noted, but it's not as important.Notation Issues and Typos:* I wouldn't call Darkvision perfect, but instead note it only sees black and white. Your choice.* It's worth noting his shield is Heavy Steel. That's what matches the weight and cost, anyway.* Looks like your Fortitude Save should be +4 (2 from Class, 2 from Con).Comments:* This character has a very strong old school feel, right down to the artwork. I'm thinking that was the classic dwarf image from the original Monster Manual? It's been a while.* I don't think you have to declare which of your two spheres you're making available for Favored Class bonuses by race… just that you can only increase one or the other at a time. As an aside, although Rebuke Death is cool, you probably will not need it more than 6/day.* Mentally, I'm picturing a friendly gramps kind of feel to Dunkel. With a little stern on the side.* I like seeing some far reaching goals, even if they are never quite achieved.* Dunkel might be the sort to have a classic battle cry. Give it a thought. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" />Good start, I like what I'm seeing here, but NOT YET.</blockquote>

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