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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Aura" data-source="post: 6405922" data-attributes="member: 6747658">Reviewing Erin VaneeseOverview: I like the overall character. (I like her even more with Cha 8. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile    :)"  data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" /> ) Working through it starts becoming apparent where the design is going. There are very few mechanical issues with this character, and none that get in the way of approval. The background story is a little disturbing but not overly so.Edits: I made some changes along the way.- I removed the total values for untrained skills that would not be usable. This was done because GMs are largely used to the convention.- I totaled up her gold and ended up getting one gp less in expenditures, and then refunded the spare gp.- I clarified she was working on her arcane pool with her FC bonus by noting it had been taken 1x. If this is not the case, feel free to note otherwise (it seemed a reasonable conclusion.)- I went OCD and made minor formatting edits and clarifications:[sblock=Disclosure]Added parentheses around misc bonuses in Skills section, added her name/class/level/artwork to the adventures page, moved her to the DWI, removed references to Class 1 and added Magus, cleaned up some columns, added accounting in finances, noted effect of MW backpack[/sblock]A couple things you'll want to do:- Meld together the descriptions of Canny Defense from Magus and Duelist and put the new text in place of the old. The current version doesn't really say more than 'go look it up'.- Her icon in the adventures page may not look so good. If you want, you can make a cropped version of her character artwork (say just head and shoulders) and put that in. I say this because this is what I'm considering for Charity.Anyway, all is good here. Erin has her first (and Judge) APPROVAL. One more and she'll be ready for play.</blockquote>

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