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<blockquote data-quote="Cleon" data-source="post: 5305807" data-attributes="member: 57383">The first paragraph of the tactics looks like it belongs in the flavour text, and I think we can trim the flavour text down a bit.I'd rather cut the &quot;nearly man-sized&quot; from the description, since it might be a large solitary fish (and the &quot;two-foot spike&quot; might be better changed too).How's this?A black-tipped dorsal fin breaks the surface of the water, followed&nbsp; by a tail covered in yellow and black barbs, terminating in a long spike.&nbsp; The rest of the fish is covered in bright&nbsp; yellow scales that gleam like gold.&nbsp; Its eyes resemble black saucers.&nbsp;A lemon fish is a carnivorous, subterranean fish found in bodies of fresh&nbsp; water where luminous lichen or other sources approximate natural&nbsp; lighting.&nbsp; It gets its name from its bright yellow scales.&nbsp; Observing a&nbsp; lemon fish through water is reminiscent of a living gold piece. &nbsp;While not as bloodthirsty as piranha, these fish are vicious predators who enjoy the taste of flesh. A hungry lemon fish will attack prey ranging from as small as a rat to even&nbsp; larger than themselves. These fish are docile and nearly harmless if they&nbsp; have fed recently, but they must eat a large amount&nbsp; to provide a good meal. The strongest fish feed more often, and therefore grow to&nbsp; become stronger still and vastly more dangerous. Lemon fish are mostly solitary. Large lemon fish always hunt alone, but the smaller ones sometimes hunt in packs, although never more than&nbsp; three are found together. &nbsp;Although lemon fish flesh is tough and generally inedible, its organs&nbsp; are a prized delicacy among duergar and drow.&nbsp; Lemon fish spawn up to&nbsp; four times a year, yielding 100-600 eggs each time. Only ten out of 100&nbsp; young survive to reach adulthood. The eggs of the lemon fish are edible&nbsp; and command up to 400 gp per pound (roughly 600 eggs).&nbsp;A typical lemon fish is 4 to 5 feet long and weighs between 30 and 60&nbsp; pounds, but these fish can reach 16 feet in length and a ton in weight.&nbsp; Lemon fish are approximately a foot long for each hit dice they possess.&nbsp; COMBATLemon fish strike with their jaws and spine-covered tails.&nbsp; If injured, a&nbsp; lemon fish may release a cloud of stunning toxins into the surrounding&nbsp; water.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Cleon, post: 5305807, member: 57383"] The first paragraph of the tactics looks like it belongs in the flavour text, and I think we can trim the flavour text down a bit. I'd rather cut the "nearly man-sized" from the description, since it might be a large solitary fish (and the "two-foot spike" might be better changed too). How's this? [I]A black-tipped dorsal fin breaks the surface of the water, followed by a tail covered in yellow and black barbs, terminating in a long spike. The rest of the fish is covered in bright yellow scales that gleam like gold. Its eyes resemble black saucers.[/I] A lemon fish is a carnivorous, subterranean fish found in bodies of fresh water where luminous lichen or other sources approximate natural lighting. It gets its name from its bright yellow scales. Observing a lemon fish through water is reminiscent of a living gold piece. While not as bloodthirsty as piranha, these fish are vicious predators who enjoy the taste of flesh. A hungry lemon fish will attack prey ranging from as small as a rat to even larger than themselves. These fish are docile and nearly harmless if they have fed recently, but they must eat a large amount to provide a good meal. The strongest fish feed more often, and therefore grow to become stronger still and vastly more dangerous. Lemon fish are mostly solitary. Large lemon fish always hunt alone, but the smaller ones sometimes hunt in packs, although never more than three are found together. Although lemon fish flesh is tough and generally inedible, its organs are a prized delicacy among duergar and drow. Lemon fish spawn up to four times a year, yielding 100-600 eggs each time. Only ten out of 100 young survive to reach adulthood. The eggs of the lemon fish are edible and command up to 400 gp per pound (roughly 600 eggs). A typical lemon fish is 4 to 5 feet long and weighs between 30 and 60 pounds, but these fish can reach 16 feet in length and a ton in weight. Lemon fish are approximately a foot long for each hit dice they possess. [B] COMBAT[/B] Lemon fish strike with their jaws and spine-covered tails. If injured, a lemon fish may release a cloud of stunning toxins into the surrounding water. [/QUOTE]

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