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<blockquote data-quote="Cleon" data-source="post: 5839111" data-attributes="member: 57383">Let's see...I'd add some mention of their claws to the description.&nbsp;&nbsp;The original has a typical settlement have 3-5 houses in a tree, so I'd change the last sentence to reflect that.Apart from mispelling &quot;mischeievous&quot; I'd tweak the wording a little. I like the bit about them having little contact with man.How's this...This&nbsp; avian humanoid has the feathered wings and scaly legs of a bird on a&nbsp; humanoid body. Its wings have stubby fingers and its clawed feet have&nbsp; long prehensile toes.&nbsp;Alans are birdlike humanoids found deep in the heart of tropical and&nbsp; sub-tropical forests. Alans rarely meet humanoids, but are generally friendly and occasionally&nbsp; helpful. They are mischievous pranksters who often play tricks on&nbsp; intruders. Alan prefer to hide from enemies, most only fight if their&nbsp; homes and families are&nbsp; threatened. Sometimes alans are hostile, attacking lone&nbsp; travelers and raiding humanoid villages at night.Most alan live&nbsp; in small clans. Their lairs are small, ornately&nbsp; fashioned treehouses hidden among the branches of large trees. A typical&nbsp; clan has three to five such houses in a single tree, with sentries&nbsp; perched in nearby trees. &nbsp;An alan stands 3 to 4 feet tall, has a wingspan of about 8 feet, and typically weighs 15 to 25 pounds.&nbsp;Alans speak Common and their own language.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Cleon, post: 5839111, member: 57383"] Let's see... I'd add some mention of their claws to the description. The original has a typical settlement have 3-5 houses in a tree, so I'd change the last sentence to reflect that. Apart from mispelling "mischeievous" I'd tweak the wording a little. I like the bit about them having little contact with man. How's this... [I]This[/I][I] avian humanoid has the feathered wings and scaly legs of a bird on a humanoid body. Its wings have stubby fingers and its clawed feet have long prehensile toes.[/I] Alans are birdlike humanoids found deep in the heart of tropical and sub-tropical forests. Alans rarely meet humanoids, but are generally friendly and occasionally helpful. They are mischievous pranksters who often play tricks on intruders. Alan prefer to hide from enemies, most only fight if their homes and families are threatened. Sometimes alans are hostile, attacking lone travelers and raiding humanoid villages at night. Most alan live in small clans. Their lairs are small, ornately fashioned treehouses hidden among the branches of large trees. A typical clan has three to five such houses in a single tree, with sentries perched in nearby trees. An alan stands 3 to 4 feet tall, has a wingspan of about 8 feet, and typically weighs 15 to 25 pounds. Alans speak Common and their own language. [/QUOTE]

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