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Message: <blockquote data-quote="ThWatcher" data-source="post: 5007528" data-attributes="member: 86237">I was late joining this group and that is the reason I didn't get into the game soon enough.  If I had been, I was going to use the following as my intro.  (Hopefully, the one I did use will work and Janice will be joining the group in short order.)I'm posting the original intro so I can get a little feedback.  I'm trying to improve on my writing skills so I want to know what you people thing of the following.[SBLOCK]She had been walking most of the day and it still didn't seem right.  But there it was, the grocery store in her dream.  She went around behind the store and found the cargo port.  Walking casually, she moves around the truck and when no one is watching, she grabs an empty cardboard box and slips under the trailer.From there she peeks between the trailer and the platform to watch the unloading.  At the right moment, a largish, 2 or so lbs., fruit rolls from the top of moving pallet and continues to roll towards the edge of the platform.  As it rolls off the edge, she catches it.  She then settles down to enjoy her 'lucky' gift.  She sits on the box, her back to the concrete, and begins to eat the fruit.  After a few minutes, the fruit is gone and her stomach is full.  Being tired from walking most of the day, and her stomach full, she is almost falling asleep when the flash happens.  A few seconds later, the jarring, shifting ground throws her forward.  Not with tremendous speed, but with enough to throw her off balance and her head hits the rear axle of the trailer.  She passes out almost immediately and collapses to the ground, looking like nothing more than a pile of rags.Now, she stirs, moans in pain and brings her hand to her head.  With more pain, she pulls her hand back.  It comes away with blood on it.  She hears people nearby, doing things to the truck, and wonders if she should trust them long enough to get some help.  After a moment, her head clears enough to think that she could probably escape them as easily as she has done other people for the last year.  With that thought in mind, she crawls out from under the trailer and stands,  She then moves towards the one who seems to be playing doctor.[/SBLOCK]</blockquote>

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