Kinomen, What do you think?

[Kinomen Dragoon]

Kinomen

For a long time the Kinomen hide in the mountians before their presence was nesecery.Before Humans ruled the plane of Farun Kinomen bounded acrossed the mountians.Their apperence is somewhat like a humaoid dragon.But they have their strenghts. After a near millinea of sleep a giant mountian range rises on the north side of Shadowdale.Many a afired when draconic looking creatures walk up. But these people are know for their kindness. But in combat show no mercy.They are also the creatores of the Dragoon art.Also the founders of the Order of Sky Knights.

Medium sized Humaniods
Base Speed:40ft
Covering area in a flash is necessery because their are predetors about.
+2 Str, +2 Dex, +2 Int, -2 Cha
Their boadies are fully fit, along with their minds.But some people find their looks scary.
+6 to Jump
The Kinomen have wings that let them push off the ground with more force
Favord classragoon(also on EN world)
ECL=+1

What do you think?

 

[SylverFlame]

Not too bad, but one error that I saw.

You increase their speed because they have to run like a mountain goat. Of course, you explain their jump bonus by saying jumping is easier than running. Shouldn't these be conflicting reasons?

I'd make the speed lower and explain it by saying that the hard life in the mountain means covering large areas fast (no cover to protect from predators seeing you).

As for jump, every mountain has cracks and crevises that one needs to cross. You could also give them rudimentary wings (no flying) that allow them to "push" themselves a little higher/farther when they jump. That would also explain their heightened jump ability.

Also, the instant initiative bonus and the likely bonus from dex (due to its +2), along with the rest of the race as it is written makes me wonder if this race hovers near ECL +2. I don't know because the ECL factor of 3e only gives me head-aches.

 

[Jeph]

According to Solardin's ECL calculator, this race is +.9 ECL:

40' base speed: +0.2
+4 physical abilities: +0.4
+0 mental abilities: +0
+6 jump: +0.3
Total: +0.9

Nice job, definitely not overpowered. I might give it another +2 jump or +10' speed.

 

[Bean 2.0]

- 0.1 on mental abilities
the minus 2 charisma

 

[Jeph]

+0 mental abilities:
+2 int, -2 Cha

 

[Bean 2.0]

o yea