Naerl’s lunar legerdemain, critique please.

[Ferret]

Naerl’s lunar legerdemain, critique please.

Ashamedly this spell is based on something from the merlin film, I'd like some critique on it though. Please.

Naerl’s lunar legerdemain
Illusion [glamer]
Level: Bard 0, Wiz/Sor 0
Components: V
Casting time: Swift action
Effect: Movement of the moon
Range: 30 ft.
Target: One creature
Duration: 1 minute
Saving throw: Will (disbelief)
Spell resistance: No

This minor cantrip creates the image that the caster has pulled the moon from the sky, and for the duration the caster holds the ‘moon’ between their fingers. They can perform any number of slight of hand tricks they wish with the moon. Only one creature can see the image, and they must be within 30 ft for the caster to target them as the viewer of the spell. This has no effect on light levels or any other affect the moon might cause naturally.

The spell also creates a perceived gap where the moon was. Alternatives of this spell exist where the cast grabs a hand full of stars that appear like dust in their hand.

 

[Ferret]

No one is interested? Judging by the views I'd say it was the title. Back to the spell though....

 

[Interested2]

I love it, but how big is the area that sees the moon moved? If the moon is ACCUALLY moved, then wouldn't it be bouncing around all over the place as 1st level wizards used this cantrip?

 

[Clay_More]

Very funny little spell, very flavourful, just remember to mention that no actual effects of having the moon removed occours (if its a night of full moon, no darkness occours, creatures who suffer from special effects in moonlight are not affected). Don't know if its necessary to mention how large an area around the caster that is affected, i.e. how far away people notice the moon missing.

A nice spell, definility Merlinesque

 

[Ferret]

Huzzah! *Does feedback dance*

I'll go back and clarify how it only effects one creature. Glad you like it.

[Edit: I made some changes, some clarifications. Looking back now I'd like to make an advanced version. Call it something like Naerl's Lunar theft....