What you have is almost the same as how it’s written. If the issue is how the game presents things, than I agree completely.
Well, how the game is presented
is how it's written, so...
But I'm assuming what you really meant was the end results. The actual result of the mechanics. Then yes, I can accept that.
But when I suggested my 2-sentence replacement, I wasn't entirely kidding.
Yes, if you were to look at it closer, you'd probably need a couple more sentences to fully replicate the byzantine tangle that is the actual CRB rules.
But my point is that that I am completely serious about the overarching point.
RAW Crafting gets a clear
D if not an actual
F as a design grade from me simply because I'm convinced the exact same rules could have been written as a single paragraph (even if a 6-sentence one and not my 2-sentence attempt). And that this would have not only been simpler and faster, it would have fooled far less players into thinking Crafting actually makes you money, which it quite assuredly does not do.
I refuse to just say "okay so the rules could have been written better but the actual results aren't too bad". The rules are written
catastrophically bad compared to alternatives, and I consider myself as having proven that. The fact the actual results aren't "too bad" does not let Paizo off this hook.