Upper_Krust
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Hi all! 
Sorry you didn't get your submission finished Daniel...however if I was to critique it I would find myself agreeing with Vaxalon.
Though I have to admit I enjoyed reading your proposal!
You write well, but for me there were just too few ideas involved. Thinking about it I have probably went in the opposite direction - too many ideas (crammed?) with the writing suffering as a result? (but hey I am a designer first and a writer second!
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Sorry you didn't get your submission finished Daniel...however if I was to critique it I would find myself agreeing with Vaxalon.
Though I have to admit I enjoyed reading your proposal!

You write well, but for me there were just too few ideas involved. Thinking about it I have probably went in the opposite direction - too many ideas (crammed?) with the writing suffering as a result? (but hey I am a designer first and a writer second!
