Hmmm...maybe if you sat down, ignored everything else...and pumped out updates...say once or twice a day, maybe all that you
think is wrong with your writing will improve.
You're always your worst critic.
Back to actual publishing work (researching that is...its always nice to know I'll eventually make some money off of having to read sourcebooks--not to mention it gives me a billion ideas to hurl at my players)
I'll update at some point today or tomorrow.
And for those of you that haven't read Valus +20 but are fans of the Heroes of Marchford Storyhour...go read it (link in my .sig, linked also in Yeti's .sig). It tells of what's happening in the twenty years between the as-of-yet uncompleted SH by me...as well as what happens after that. We're slipping all kinds of pertinent info into it...but leaving a lot of spoilers open for my Heroes translation.
If you like it, bump it. Get the Yeti (and me) off our collective asses.
~Fune