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<blockquote data-quote="paradox42" data-source="post: 3298033" data-attributes="member: 29746">Copy/paste errors are still in many places in the document, but others are starting to point those out so I'll refrain from doing so here.What jars me the most, when reading Ascension (and also, to a lesser extent, the Bestiary I) is the number of incomplete sentences and sentence fragments. Most of these in Ascension are sentences where the author started to write something but couldn't or didn't complete the thought; others (the most common type in Bestiary I, but prevalent in Ascension as well) are apparent complete sentences which are nevertheless incomplete thoughts due to not having complete grammatical structure.An example of the latter will show what I mean. Page 40, within the description of Anomalies, the following sentence exists: &quot;Creatures otherwise superfluous to cosmic balance but possessed of power enough to give even a time lord pause.&quot; That's incomplete- it's a description of Anomalies, but there's no verb. <img src="https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/joypixels/assets/8.0/png/unicode/64/1f642.png" class="smilie smilie--emoji" loading="lazy" width="64" height="64" alt=":)" title="Smile&nbsp; &nbsp; :)"&nbsp; data-smilie="1"data-shortname=":)" /> What are these terrible creatures doing? In this case, and in fact most of them as far as I can tell, it would be more grammatically correct to turn the sentence fragment into an extension of the previous one. In the example given above, the preceding sentence reads &quot;Anomalies are extra-cosmic abominations.&quot; Lump the two together and you get &quot;Anomalies are extra-cosmic abominations- creatures otherwise superfluous to cosmic balance but possessed of power enough to give even a time lord pause.&quot; That's a complete sentence.Examples of the former include the second sentence on page 37 under the DIMENSION WAR subheading- &quot;However, as the universe expanded dimensional tectonics caused bleeding and tears to appear, through which&quot; (it ends there in clear mid-sentence). Another example, on the next page, is in the first paragraph describing Elder Ones: &quot;Each is the personification of .&quot; Personification of what?</blockquote>

[QUOTE="paradox42, post: 3298033, member: 29746"] Copy/paste errors are still in many places in the document, but others are starting to point those out so I'll refrain from doing so here. What jars me the most, when reading Ascension (and also, to a lesser extent, the Bestiary I) is the number of incomplete sentences and sentence fragments. Most of these in Ascension are sentences where the author started to write something but couldn't or didn't complete the thought; others (the most common type in Bestiary I, but prevalent in Ascension as well) are apparent complete sentences which are nevertheless incomplete thoughts due to not having complete grammatical structure. An example of the latter will show what I mean. Page 40, within the description of Anomalies, the following sentence exists: "Creatures otherwise superfluous to cosmic balance but possessed of power enough to give even a time lord pause." That's incomplete- it's a description of Anomalies, but there's no verb. :) What are these terrible creatures doing? In this case, and in fact most of them as far as I can tell, it would be more grammatically correct to turn the sentence fragment into an extension of the previous one. In the example given above, the preceding sentence reads "Anomalies are extra-cosmic abominations." Lump the two together and you get "Anomalies are extra-cosmic abominations- creatures otherwise superfluous to cosmic balance but possessed of power enough to give even a time lord pause." That's a complete sentence. Examples of the former include the second sentence on page 37 under the DIMENSION WAR subheading- "However, as the universe expanded dimensional tectonics caused bleeding and tears to appear, through which" (it ends there in clear mid-sentence). Another example, on the next page, is in the first paragraph describing Elder Ones: "Each is the personification of ." Personification of what? [/QUOTE]

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