First of all, my brilliance:[sblock]
Just so you know, what you wrote here was rated at grade level 7.58 and a Fog Index of 9.15.
So, no, what you wrote wasn't hard to understand. Because it wasn't even up to 8th grade reading levels.
Look it up here:
Tests Document Readability
Apart from being drivel (and I don't disagree with you), it's also written at 11th grade level, which is amusing given how many people think 4th edition was written for 5th graders.
First paragraph of my book:
Indication of the number of years of formal education that a person requires in order to easily understand the text on the first reading
Gunning Fog index : 49.44
Now, either I'm a genius (which I'd gladly accept), or there's something I don't quite completely trust about the system. My second paragraph came up:
Indication of the number of years of formal education that a person requires in order to easily understand the text on the first reading
Gunning Fog index : 22.98
So, dramatically lower. Maybe the first one was a bit off. My next paragraphs are 15.37, 18.17, 19.88, 22.11, 17.49, and 20.99 (end of intro). According to Wiki (always reliable!):
Wiki said:
The index estimates the years of formal education needed to understand the text on a first reading. A fog index of 12 requires the reading level of a U.S. high school senior (around 18 years old).
My other ratings on the site seemed more valid, though (at times). My Coleman–Liau index ranged from 10.5-13.3 (ages 16-19); my Flesch Kincaid Grade level ranged from 13.76-47.48 (best understood by university graduates, or some high school reading); my ARI ranged from 15.2-58.04 (ages 20-63); my SMOG ranged from 14.09-25.58 (14-25 years of education).
Well, color me skeptical. I was 20/21 years old when I wrote the book. I doubt I'm as intelligent as it makes me out to be (at times). I mean, I smart and all (yes, "I smart"), but still... [/sblock]
Okay, now that
that's out of the way...
I'm all for writing at a decently low level. Obviously, you can dip too low, here, but the game needs clarity, inspiring text, and implied themes (violence, intrigue, danger, etc.). Nothing needs to be over the top or so low that it's painful to read. Nothing needs to be bogged down by its own weight, or simply repetitive and fluffy. The text just need to be there being inspiring, thematic, and clear.
Just create that spark, and then get out of the way as my imagination takes off. That's all you need to do. As always, play what you like
