Halivar
First Post
Round 1.1 spoiler:
Thanks for the comments, judges. I was excited by the idea of mixing pulp detective and occult horror, but I guess I didn't really have a gameplan for really infusing the two cohesively. I can definitely tell where my story ceases to be one and jerkily shifts to being the other. Next time I'll definitely bite off a little less.
The accents. As I was writing them I was a bit concerned. I wanted the atmosphere so badly, but I also knew reading them was a bit of a chore. So I flipped a coin. I think maybe the coin landed on the wrong side.
Someone mentioned Cthluthlu (sp?). Did my story seem like a rip-off? I've never read Lovecraft or any of his peers in that genre, or played CoC, so I can plead ignorance. I definitely had in mind some of those old Italian horror movies and more modern American counterparts, like Phantasm. As for the detective element, I really just wanted to do a detective character. I only wish I had more time to do it right.
One thing that struck me about MacBeth's story is that he focused less on an epic story external to the characters, and rather let the story play out entirely as a personal, introspective progression within the main character himself. External events only serve as catalysts for this progression. Very well written, MacBeth. It definitely gives me more insight on what it takes to write a winning Ceramic DM entry.
Congrats on winning round 1, MacBeth! I knew you had it as soon as I read your first paragraph. Well done.
Thanks for the comments, judges. I was excited by the idea of mixing pulp detective and occult horror, but I guess I didn't really have a gameplan for really infusing the two cohesively. I can definitely tell where my story ceases to be one and jerkily shifts to being the other. Next time I'll definitely bite off a little less.
The accents. As I was writing them I was a bit concerned. I wanted the atmosphere so badly, but I also knew reading them was a bit of a chore. So I flipped a coin. I think maybe the coin landed on the wrong side.
Someone mentioned Cthluthlu (sp?). Did my story seem like a rip-off? I've never read Lovecraft or any of his peers in that genre, or played CoC, so I can plead ignorance. I definitely had in mind some of those old Italian horror movies and more modern American counterparts, like Phantasm. As for the detective element, I really just wanted to do a detective character. I only wish I had more time to do it right.
One thing that struck me about MacBeth's story is that he focused less on an epic story external to the characters, and rather let the story play out entirely as a personal, introspective progression within the main character himself. External events only serve as catalysts for this progression. Very well written, MacBeth. It definitely gives me more insight on what it takes to write a winning Ceramic DM entry.