carpedavid's Land of the Crane (Updated 11 May, 2006)

Wow! Thanks for the great comments TDR.

TDRandall said:
What races ARE there, how many temples/religions? Is there a half-oni template out there or did you make that one up yourself?

The racial makeup of Tanayari's "civilized races" is about 70% human, 25% vanara, and 5% everything else, which includes hengeyokai, half-oni, and another antopomorphic race of my own creation called "khelreth." Additionally, to the south of Tanayari is a vast area ruled by lizard-riding, kobold barbarians, so you may at some point see a stray kobold running around.

With regard to religion, pretty much everyone in Tanayari is a practices a mix of Fenism, which is a fantasy version of Shinto, and Daruma-do, which is a fantasy religion with a "hint" of Buddhism. There is also a fantastic version of Onmyodo, a mystical tradition, which is what the shugenja in this setting practice. Most monks are strict followers of Daruma-do, and their temples are numerous. You can throw a stick and hit a monk pretty much everywhere.

The half-oni is actually a full-fledged race that I created for another campaign world and adapted for use in this setting. It was originally a half-demon, and became a half-oni in translation.

I'm surprised Musashi didn't step up first...Still, that's player choices rather than yours.

There's actually a meta-game reason that he didn't, but that might be pulling back the curtain too far :). Additionally, though, Musashi is the one who steps up to defend the honor of the clan time and time again. Takashi likes to test himself against other warriors. Hopefully that characterization will become clearer in future updates.

For the battle, how long did it actually last? It sounds like one attempted attack by Kitsune and one response by Takashi and that was it. If it was very short, then I think you filled in the details for color very nicely.

It lasted five rounds, but most of those were filled with misses. I edited the fight down a bit to prevent boredom.

So that's something good from last story post, now to try to balance it with something to improve. Let's see ... the paragraph about sharing sake and stories feels like it glossed over a lot. You missed a perfect opportunity to either fill in the detail of your world or even foreshadow a bit by sharing something from Kitsune's experience.

Ah, that's a good point.

BTW, is this trip supposed to be the musha shugyo for Musashi and/or Fukasu, have they already done that, or is the focus on "fighting styles" intended to mean that only monks realy do this?

This is a pilgrimage that the PCs are undertaking at the behest of their clan. I think both Musashi and Fukasu seize the opportunity to improve themselves, but there's an overriding sense of purpose for them. You'll see both samurai and monks engaged in the warrior's pilgrimage in later updates.

Make sure when you note something that you give enough down in the note itself to refresh the reader exactly what you are noting about. Then I can feel safe in just reading through and knowing the mystery will be made clear later. Otherwise I've got to scroll up and down again.

Another great point. I'll make sure to keep this in mind in the future.

Thanks for the update even when you're swamped. Shows your dedication, either to your craft or to your fans. If only other SH writers (who will remain nameless to protect the guilty) would take a page from your book!

I feel somewhat bad that some of the updates are short, but I'm happy that I've been able to update regularly this long.
 

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As a pre-update, I've edited in the conversation between Kitsune and the other characters into the last post. The new update should be posted on Thursday or Friday.
 


"Oni!" Takashi exclaimed.

"We should help them," Musashi replied, and the monk and the samurai took off running down the hill, followed closely by Fukasu. They could see another samurai slashing at the creature's left claw with a katana; a man who moved like a monk, but who was dressed in elaborately embroidered, sky-blue robes, bashing the other claw with a pair of escrima sticks; a third man in a peasant's outfit jabbing the creature in the tail with a ninja-to; and a woman wearing the vestments of an onmyoji* standing atop the next hill.

Takashi reached the beast and slammed his fist into its chitinous exoskeleton. A second too late, he realized that the oni's carapace was covered in thousands of tiny, hooked barbs. He grimaced as chunks of his skin ripped away from his fist, and tried to fight off a wave of nausea to no avail.

The samurai swung next. Musashi caught a glimpse of the man's sword when he slashed through the tip of the creature's left claw. That sword looks familiar, he thought as he stepped in close. After dodging one of the creature's tentacles, he looked over at the other man, and realized why he looked familiar. "Hiro-san?" he said, in shock.

The samurai looked over to see his younger brother's look of surprise, and then past him to see a young half-oni girl jab her ninja-to into a gap between two chitinous plates. Green blood squirted out and hit her in the face, and he suppressed a smile. "Musashi-san? Fu-chan? What are you doing here?"

The onmyoji woman pressed the tips of her index and middle fingers to her lips and then whispered a mystic phrase. The words flew from her mouth and swirled above the oni, like bats in a feeding frenzy. Then, suddenly, a pillar of flame erupted from the middle of the swarm and struck the middle of the tentacled creature, causing it to spasm twice, then die.

The man in the exotic robes looked over at Fukasu with surprise, and then shouted something in a language that she didn't understand. In response, the man in the peasant outfit tumbled out from behind the carcass of the beast, and rose to a fighting stance, while the female onmyoji pressed her fingers to her lips again and began to whisper.

Hiro looked around at the activity of his partners, looked at Fukasu, and then waved his arms frantically. "No, no, no!" he shouted, and then barked out something equally frantic in the foreign language he had used earlier.

The onmyoji paused, and the two men looked at Hiro suspiciously. "This is Fukasu," he said, pointing to the young ninja, "She is a half-oni who was raised in my daimyo's palace." He smiled and patted her on the back, "She's ok!"

The man in the blue robes slid his escrima sticks into his belt, placed his right fist against the palm of his left hand, and bowed deeply; the man in the peasant garb sheathed his ninja-to, smiled broadly, and swaggered up to the young heroes; and the onmyoji woman stepped into the shadow of a tree and emerged from Hiro's shadow. She placed her hand on the elder Kurosawa samurai's shoulder and smiled cattily at Fukasu.

"This is my little brother, Musashi," Hiro said with a smile. Musashi bowed to each of his brother's companions.

"You've already met, Fukasu," he laughed. Fukasu smiled nervously and bowed.

"That's Kakeru," he said, pointing to the young shaman who was just now pulling the cart up to the scene.

He turned toward Takashi, "I'm sorry, my brave friend, but I do not believe we have ever been introduced."

"I am Takashi," the young monk replied, "of the Temple of Thunder and Lightning."

"It is a pleasure to meet you, Takashi-san." Hiro said, and bowed just enough to be appropriate. Samurai never bowed deeply to those of a lower class. He turned to his companions and introduced them to the four pilgrims. Li Cao, the man in the exotic robes, turned out to be a monk from the lands of Xin, far to the east of Tanayari. The man in peasant clothing was named Isobe Jin, and was apparently a ninja in disguise. The onmyoji woman introduced herself as Yamashira Taka.

With introductions complete, the two adventuring parties sat down to rest. Hiro looked over at his brother and asked, "So why are you all out here?"

"We're taking the clan's offering to the Fire Crane."

"Oh, that's right," he nodded, then laughed, "I forgot what year it was." He turned to his companions, "I led the party that took my clan's offering to Daichi no Tora, what was it, six years ago?"

"Seven," Taka corrected him.

"Thank you, Ta-chan," he winked at her, "Years and dates really aren't my strong point."

Or numbers, or words, Musashi thought to himself in a fit of sibling rivalry, "What have you been doing lately, Hiro-san?"

"Hunting oni," he replied with a satisfied smile.

Fukasu looked over at him, eyes wide and mouth agape.

"Oh, uhh, that is," he stammered quickly, "Only bad oni."

Fukasu cringed and Hiro sighed, "At any rate, we're on our way back to Kurosawa. I'm going to introduce Ta-chan to father." The onmyoji woman blushed and smiled, then gazed at Hiro with adoration. "We're going to be married," he whispered.

"I'm sure my father would be happy to perform the ceremony," Kakeru offered.

The two groups talked for a few more hours before moving on. Hiro, Taka, Jin, and Li Cao set to the task of burning the dead oni's body, while Kakeru, Fukasu, Musashi, and Takashi climbed back into the cart and pressed on.

The four heroes from Kurosawa spent the next few days riding along the road, stopping each night to camp in fields filled with wheat and barley – some of the few fields in Tanayari that grew grain other than rice. The peasants who worked the fields bowed and prostrated themselves to the heroes as they passed by. Musashi nodded to them as they passed. It's good that they know their place, he thought to himself.

On the 13th day of Yongatsu, the heroes left the fields behind and rode into the rice paddies surrounding the town of Takayama. On either side of the road, the ground sloped down several feet, at which point it was covered in a foot of water. Beneath the water grew the life-giving rice that over ninety-five percent of Tanayarans depended upon to live.

Suddenly, the sounds of shouting and barking startled the group. Fukasu looked over to her right only to see a farmer wielding a sickle chasing a pack of snarling, snapping, drooling bakemono directly toward them.

Next: bakemono, sake, and oooooh - ninja!

Notes:

* The onmyoji are mystics whose main area of concern is the balance and harmony of the elements. Most are of noble birth, and often act as advisors to their local daimyo. Kakeru's father, Nobu, is an onmyoji. Mechanically, onmyoji are equivalent to shugenja.
 


Ivy Sylvan said:
Why's she being all catty with me?! I'd like more details on these people. Again, if not in here then out of this post.

If I remember correctly, she took the young, attractive, exotic girl that her betrothed knew so well to be a potential threat. The conversation in the post does represent about how long you guys spent talking to them, so there wasn't much in the way of information that you got out of them.

What kind of details would you like, though?

Edit: You may have missed that session, which would explain why you don't remember much. I really need to keep track of which *players* are present at every session in addition to all the character and story stuff.
 
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Another great post, Carpedavid!

This description: "thousands of tiny, hooked barbs. He grimaced as chunks of his skin ripped away from his fist, and tried to fight off a wave of nausea" was delightfully gruesome, and yet not overdone.

This description: "The words flew from her mouth and swirled above the oni, like bats in a feeding frenzy. Then, suddenly, a pillar of flame erupted from the middle of the swarm and struck the middle of the tentacled creature" I thought was very evocative (oops, is that a pun?)

"It's good that they know their place" is so .... Samurai. Fits in well to the aura of the land, is stated so matter-of-factly and couldn't help but raise the American "freedom and fairness" hackles on the back of my neck.

Nice setup for possible recurring characters and relationship situations. Depending on how long the delivery of the offering to the Fire Crane actually ends up taking, they could find a very different situation back home from what they left!

OK - "world" questions! (if they won't spoil anything, of course)

I don't remember Shugenja developing a shadow walk ability. Something I overlooked/forgot? An addition for your world? Or is Taka hiding another class somewhere in her past?

It's from the prior post, but what race is Mr. Straw hair/sapphire eyes?

Some odd/funny things (just my brain misfiring, most likely!)

If a ninja in disguise can be positively identified so easily, then perhaps he's not much of a ninja! Why did the group think Isobe Jin was one in disguise? Did they actually state that in game (which would seem to be incredibly dishonoring if he wasn't a ninja, and incredibly foolish if he was since it seems like he should eliminate a threat to his secrecy) or was it just the group's general consensus after the fact? How prevalent are ninjas in the land, in actuality and in story? (Could they be mislabeling him based simply on the fact that he "seemed" shadey or not-forthright so he "must" be a ninja according to conventional "wisdom"?)

The conversation and even the noticing the familiarity of the sword DURING the battle was a bit strange. Maybe on the run down to the battle or after it's all done and everyone is catching their breath, but once all attention should be on defeating the enemy it seemed out of place. Almost ... superheroish?

I checked the internet on what escrima sticks were, so NOW I know. But I'm far from being a martial arts lingo expert, so when I was first reading through my neurons misfired and saw "eczema". Oy Vay!

I'm intrigued about the setup for next time. Are the bakemono running away from the farmer because he routed them? Or is he's chasing them trying to get something back? Or could he actually somehow be their leader and he's hearding the group to take on our stalwart PCs? I know I know, I'll just have to wait like the rest of the peanut gallery.

Oh, I'm looking forward to some more character development/back story. Kakeru in particular seems to be fading into the woodwork - is he an active PC, inactive PC, or DM run NPC at this point in the story?
 

TDRandall said:
Nice setup for possible recurring characters and relationship situations. Depending on how long the delivery of the offering to the Fire Crane actually ends up taking, they could find a very different situation back home from what they left!

Thanks for the kind comments, TDR. As you'll see from future updates, the party has done a number of things that will make the situation back home very different from what they left. But all in due time. :)

I don't remember Shugenja developing a shadow walk ability. Something I overlooked/forgot? An addition for your world? Or is Taka hiding another class somewhere in her past?

You may see more of Taka later, so I'll leave that a mystery for now.

It's from the prior post, but what race is Mr. Straw hair/sapphire eyes?

By "race," I'm guessing that you mean "ethnicity," since Kitsune mentions that the monk was human. Mr. Straw hair is the yet-to-be-introduced 5th PC in the group, and his player doesn't actually know what ethnicity he is yet - few people have ever seen someone that looks like him. However, all that information is going to come out in game in the next few sessions. In case you don't feel like waiting 'till that point in the story hour, you can check out the spoiler below:

He's a member of the Ainu tribe, the original inhabitants of eastern Tanayari. They were almost completely wiped out by the ethnic Tanayarans as they spread east and by the Xin warlords as they spread west. At present, only a few thousand Ainu remain, mostly in isolated villages in eastern Tanayari.

If a ninja in disguise can be positively identified so easily, then perhaps he's not much of a ninja! Why did the group think Isobe Jin was one in disguise? Did they actually state that in game (which would seem to be incredibly dishonoring if he wasn't a ninja, and incredibly foolish if he was since it seems like he should eliminate a threat to his secrecy) or was it just the group's general consensus after the fact? How prevalent are ninjas in the land, in actuality and in story? (Could they be mislabeling him based simply on the fact that he "seemed" shadey or not-forthright so he "must" be a ninja according to conventional "wisdom"?)

I'm using the term "ninja" rather loosely in this campaign, as a flavor-appropriate way to describe pretty much anyone of the rogue-ish persuasion. While there are distinct ninja-clans (which you'll see a lot of later), the term, as I'm using it, is not exclusive to their members. "Historically" accurate? Not really, but then neither are giant lobster oni. :)

I checked the internet on what escrima sticks were, so NOW I know. But I'm far from being a martial arts lingo expert, so when I was first reading through my neurons misfired and saw "eczema". Oy Vay!

Ah, that's a good point. I'll make an effort to describe any exotic weapons beyond the katana, wakazashi, and ninja-to.

Oh, I'm looking forward to some more character development/back story. Kakeru in particular seems to be fading into the woodwork - is he an active PC, inactive PC, or DM run NPC at this point in the story?

Kakeru has always been an active PC, but, as a shaman in a party with a samurai and soon-to-be two monks, he's chosen to play a supporting role in combat. You'll see that he gets a *lot* more face time when we get to the social-interaction parts of the campaign.
 

Bakemono Mambo

An early update this week. If I'm lucky, perhaps another on Friday.

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Long cords of saliva streamed from the bakemono's mouths as they leapt and bounded across the watery terrain. Takashi and Musashi jumped down out of the cart and charged toward the pack of small, green goblinoids, running part of the way and splashing the rest. Upon reaching the lead creature, Musashi drew his katana and swung it in an overhead arc, rising quickly and then descending powerfully. Unfortunately, all he hit was the water at his feet when the bakemono dodged out of the way. Damn, these things are quick, he thought.

Fukasu, in turn, jumped from the cart, unfurled her wings, and caught an air current in one fluid motion. With two mighty flaps, she covered the distance to the snarling pack, and then splashed down into the rice paddy, grimacing as she sank up to her ankles in the soft earth. She lashed out at the nearest barking bakemono with her ninja-to, but it was too fast for her blade.

Upon seeing the inefficacy of his companions, Kakeru closed his eyes and projected his will into the realm of the spirits. "Great ancestors," he intoned, "please guide the blades and fists of my companions." He opened his eyes to see the faint outlines of his ancestral spirits as they shimmered in the midday sun. The spirits were watched the fight over the shoulders of his companions, and, he noticed as it progressed, would occasionally bend down to whisper advice in their ears.

I hope that helps, the young shaman thought to himself, but I better get over there just in case. He hefted himself down from the cart, and felt the mud squish over his geta and between his toes. It was a feeling he was becoming all too familiar with, all too quickly.

As the rest of the bakemono pack closed in on the party, Takashi kicked ineffectually at the bakemono closest to him. It lunged and clawed at his chest, scraping and tearing at the skin that was only minimally protected by his robes. A second of the vicious, green goblinoids cut deeply into Fukasu's midsection with its hard, black claws, and a third clamped its jaws down on her forearm. She screamed, and managed to shake the creature off, but not before it had severed her flesh and cracked the bone beneath. She stumbled backward, adrenaline the only thing keeping her from blacking out from the pain, while the bakemono shook its whole body in a blood-fueled frenzy. Like a dog shaking off water, it flung a mixture of its own drool and Fukasu's blood everywhere.

Musashi took a deep breath, filling his body with power and energy, and swung his ancestral blade once again. This time, the only thing that hit the water at his feet was the head of the bakemono in front of him.

Kakeru sprinted over to Fukasu, his legs pumping furiously as he fought against the mud. With a whisper and a touch, he channeled the power of the spirits and mended her wounds. Fukasu looked at her now whole arm in surprise and then glanced over at Kakeru. That's still really strange, she thought.

She then looked up to see that Takashi was surrounded by three of the creatures, while Musashi and the farmer held off the remaining two. Takashi was a whirlwind of kicks and punches, and while it didn't look like he was hitting any of the creatures, he was successfully keeping them from piling on top of him. Now fully healed, Fukasu charged back into the melee, dodging past Musashi's shining katana and taking a position directly behind one of the three green goblinoids that was threatening Takashi. With a flick of her wrist, she slid her ninja-to into the back of its neck, severing its spinal cord.

Unfortunately, she was not quick enough to prevent the other two bakemono from opening up Takashi's stomach. They growled and snarled and gnashed their teeth as they tore into the monk's midsection, and Takashi screamed in pain. He took one look at the blood spilling out of the gashes in his belly and he turned and ran toward Kakeru.

Meanwhile, Musashi and the farmer slashed at the other two creatures with katana and sickle. One bakemono fell to the peasant's blade, but the second proved particularly jumpy, which made it hard for Musashi's powerful blows to hit.

Kakeru met Takashi halfway and implored the spirits to heal yet another of his friends. A blue glow washed over the monk's torso, and he immediately turned and ran back into the fray. Unfortunately, he ran back into the waiting claws of the two bakemono who had injured him previously. Takashi yelled as the two beasts dragged him down into the water.

Oh no¸ Kakeru thought. Water and mud splashed everywhere as the two creatures tore at Takashi's limp body. "Hang on Takashi!" he yelled as he charged the bakemono nearest to him. His powerful legs carried him across the distance in less than a second, at which point he planted his front foot, and punted the creature with his back foot, instantly breaking its neck. Fukasu screamed in fury and jabbed her blade repeatedly between the shoulder blades of the other creature, until it, too stopped moving.

Musashi's blade finally found its target, and the last of the bakemono fell in a lifeless heap. He turned to see Kakeru desperately healing Takashi. Waves of blue energy poured out of the shaman's hands and into the young monk's limp body, and after a few moments, Takashi coughed, spat out water, and groaned.

With Takashi out of danger, the group turned their attention to the farmer who had originally been chasing the bakemono. Musashi looked at him and raised an eyebrow, which was enough for him to begin bowing furiously. "Thank you, Kurosawa-sama, thank you, thank you, thank you," he said, grimacing with each bow.

Musashi nodded back, and then wiped the blood from his katana as he sheathed it. He paused for a second, frowned, and then asked, "How did you know we were of Kurosawa?"

The farmer kept his eyes focused on the ground, "I have seen our great lord's samurai pass through Takayama on occasion. Their armor is the same as yours."

"You're very observant for a peasant," Musashi remarked.

"Oh! Thank you, Kuraosawa-sama," the man smiled broadly, but kept looking at the ground.

Kakeru interrupted, speaking to the man in a tone much less harsh than his samurai companion, "Why were you chasing these bakemono? They're very dangerous creatures."

"Oh, yes," he looked at the bodies of the dead bakemono with contempt, "Over the past few days, they have trampled through my rice paddies, killed off a number of my chickens, and frightened my wife. I was getting a great deal annoyed."

"Ah," Kakeru nodded, "I am Kurosawa Kakeru, and these are my traveling companions, Kurosawa Fukasu, Kurosawa Musashi, and Takashi. And you are?"

"I am Korgusai*," he said, bowing so far that his torso was parallel to the ground, "I thank you all for ridding me of these terrible creatures. Now, perhaps, my wife can sleep soundly at night."

Oooh, sleep, Fukasu thought to herself, remembering the soft, down-filled futon she used to sleep on back in the daimyo's castle.

Takashi also thought about sleep, but he remembered the hard wooden bench he slept on at the monastery. At least I wasn't in danger of being eaten by bakemono, he thought to himself.

"If it would not offend you, Kurosawa-san," the peasant said as humbly as he possibly could, "You would honor me greatly by accepting my hospitality this evening."

Musashi, Kakeru, and Fukasu each looked at each other and shrugged. Takashi merely groaned from his spot on the ground. "Accepting your hospitality would be a fitting tribute to our lord," Kakeru said. With that, the farmer led the four travelers to his home: a square, wooden hut with a vaulted, bamboo roof. Behind the hut were a couple of smaller wooden structures, including a shed and a chicken coop.

The farmer introduced the party to his wife, Etsu, who greeted them with as much bowing and self-deprecation as her husband had. She apologized for the small size of their hut, for the poor quality of the chicken and rice stew she had prepared for dinner, for the dampness of the tatami, and for the trouble that her thoughtless husband had imposed upon them.

Kakeru made sure to complement the woman on all of the things that the apologized for. The hut was "roomy," the stew "delicious," the tatami "of very nice quality," and the trouble "our sacred duty as defenders of the Kurosawa lands." Musashi, by contrast, spent the evening looking and feeling uncomfortable. I'll never understand why peasants choose to live like this, he thought.

The next morning, Kakeru, Musashi, Takashi, and Fukasu bid farewell to their hosts and resumed their journey. Within an hour, they were in the center of the town of Takayama. "Where are we heading?" Fukasu asked.

Kakeru looked at her and grinned, "To the brewery!"

Next: All the sake that Kakeru can ever drink... Oh, and the ninja I mentioned last time!

Notes:

* Noble Tanayaran names are composed of a family name followed by a given name (e.g. Kurosawa Kakeru), while commoners are not permitted to use family names (e.g. Takashi). Some adventurers give themselves descriptive titles that take the place of their family name (or lack of family name, in the case of non-nobles). For example, the fox monk seen previously in the story introduced himself as Shuudoushi Kitsune. "Shuudoushi" means "monk."
 

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