My New Monster: Void Mural [Have some questions]

[weem]

I was working on a template that I intend on using for various monsters I create - so I started putting in just fluff/filler so I knew what went where, but then I decided I would instead use some info (As it came to) about a creature I thought up a few days ago.

Anyway, here it is (figured I would show screenshots rather than type it all out here) - my questions are below them...

DISCLAIMER: I did not put mnuch thought/work into the stats, or the text - I just typed it out rough draft style - this is not meant to represent a finished product.

1/ What Origin might this be? I chose Construct... but I could see an argument for Abberant as well

2/ Is a second page of information too much? I was thinking I could do one, and then link to a web enhancement article with the more juicy stuff... I don't know.

3/ Any other feedback (constructive) positive or negative is welcome considering the disclaimer above of course - primarily about layout, length, the idea itself, etc


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The image used [of the void mural] was pulled from google and is simply a placeholder for now

 

[Jeremy757]

don't know about the mechanics, but this is just like the poster demon from Robinson's Starman series.

It was a cool idea then and its a cool idea now.

 

[Jeremy757]

It should probably be large shadow animate or large immortal animate.

 

[weem]

don't know about the mechanics, but this is just like the poster demon from Robinson's Starman series.

It was a cool idea then and its a cool idea now.

That's cool, I never heard of that (time to Google)

It should probably be large shadow animate or large immortal animate.

Thanks!

 

[Jeremy757]

That's cool, I never heard of that (time to Google)

The story is collected in [ame="http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/1563894092/ref=cm_cr_pr_product_top"]Starman: A Wicked Inclination[/ame] trade paperback. The poster was a used by an assassin and placed in places that the people he needed to kill would go. The poster contained a portal that a demon used to body snatch the assassins victims so that he could take their souls.

 

[weem]

The poster contained a portal that a demon used to body snatch the assassins victims so that he could take their souls.

That's cool - I like this one (the one I did) because it is a creature that pulls you into it's dimension and what's inside could vary greatly. There could be various combat encounters, etc... an adventure within a painting kind of thing

The idea came to me based on my past experiences with the Marvel poower "Internal Limbo" (from long long ago).

Thanks for the reference!