Well IG, I really enjoyed the descriptions and atmosphere in this story. Having there be a death in the final combat actually just added to the whole vibe you had going (though maybe I'd have felt different if it had been my character!).
I'd love to continue with Rayel; I expect she has a great deal more story to tell, though I understand that life can make it hard to come up with a whole new adventure on the fly.
Some comments I wanted to make:
Don't worry about if things are or are not in the adventure. Probably no one who you selected for your game has read it, and even if they had, they need to keep their traps shut. Remember, everything the DM says in carefully planned in advance... even if you just made it up. So you don't have to tell us when you're inserting stuff (unless someone asks because they're thinking of buying the adventure).
I'd love to continue with Rayel; I expect she has a great deal more story to tell, though I understand that life can make it hard to come up with a whole new adventure on the fly.
Some comments I wanted to make:
Don't worry about if things are or are not in the adventure. Probably no one who you selected for your game has read it, and even if they had, they need to keep their traps shut. Remember, everything the DM says in carefully planned in advance... even if you just made it up. So you don't have to tell us when you're inserting stuff (unless someone asks because they're thinking of buying the adventure).