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jonesy

A Wicked Kendragon

• Jul 19, 2019

• #8,711

trappedslider said:

what spelling mistakes? Nothing is flagged for being spelled wrong.

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Well, ignoring the question of when is a comma or semicolon missing or not (since that can be a story telling style decision):
- line 9: missing word "as" after word "smiled"
- line 17: personally I'd place a second "that" after the single one
- line 17: replace "mentaly" with "mentally"
- line 18: replace "need" with "needed" as otherwise the sentence has a time frame mixup
- third to last paragraph has the word "theartics"

 

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trappedslider

Legend

• Jul 19, 2019

• #8,712

jonesy said:

Well, ignoring the question of when is a comma or semicolon missing or not (since that can be a story telling style decision):
- line 9: missing word "as" after word "smiled"
- line 17: personally I'd place a second "that" after the single one
- line 17: replace "mentaly" with "mentally"
- line 18: replace "need" with "needed" as otherwise the sentence has a time frame mixup
- third to last paragraph has the word "theartics"

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here's what i love about google docs, you can flag things with a comment,instead of having to say line whatever,makes it so much easier for the writer. The last one easy to find since it was the last word.

 

Aeson

I am the mysterious professor.

• Jul 19, 2019

• #8,713

Why do flat earthers always pick on NASA? Other countries have space programs. India recently tried launching a craft bound for the moon. They had to abort for technical problems.

 

Aeson

I am the mysterious professor.

• Jul 20, 2019

• #8,714

I'm never getting married. I'm just going to find a woman I don't like, and buy her a house.

 

Aeson

I am the mysterious professor.

• Jul 20, 2019

• #8,715

No one warned me when I took this job about all the kamikaze deer doing strafing runs across the street. So far I have avoided them I did have a young buck run in front of me tonight. He just ran full steam ahead. I have gotten into the habit of looking for others in the direction the deer came from.

 

megamania

Hero

• Jul 21, 2019

• #8,716

Aeson said:

Why do flat earthers always pick on NASA? Other countries have space programs. India recently tried launching a craft bound for the moon. They had to abort for technical problems.

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Aliens apologize. They would not have done that if they had known we were trying to free their POW from Area 51

 

megamania

Hero

• Jul 21, 2019

• #8,717

and remember.... where there is one deer there will be more and deer are social creatures...… "I made it across- wait my friends are still on the other side....

 

megamania

Hero

• Jul 21, 2019

• #8,718

I am teaching my son how to drive. Last night he insisted on driving..... First night time, First heavy rain and in Bennington (pop 12,000+ vs our home Arlington 2500).


We survived. Deer survived.

 

Aeson

I am the mysterious professor.

• Jul 22, 2019

• #8,719

megamania said:

and remember.... where there is one deer there will be more and deer are social creatures...… "I made it across- wait my friends are still on the other side....

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That's why I always look where the first one came from.

 

Aeson

I am the mysterious professor.

• Jul 22, 2019

• #8,720

I don't know if I agree with the casting for First Man. Buzz Aldrin 50 years later has more hair than the man playing him. I think Ryan Gosling wasn't the best Choice for Armstrong either.