Another Immortals Handbook thread

[Upper_Krust]

Okay guys, I am off to bed, if any other people who bought the unofficial version email me I will send them a copy in about 8-9 hours time (9-10am my time). I'll be looking for the feedback before 6pm my time tomorrow. G'night all.

 

[Upper_Krust]

Crud - I missed the email window by *that* much. Congrats, UK!

email me mate!

 

[Eridanis]

I feel a great disturbance in the Force. Like several hundred gamers cried out in happiness, then were silent until they could dig out their credit cards.

Mine's at the ready!

 

[Fieari]

Just sent off my email. I guess I'll get it in the morning. Can't wait!

 

[historian]

U_K -- I'll send you an e-mail from my AOL account copying my work address, from which I e-mailed you earlier in the week.

 

[Upper_Krust]

Hi all!

Okay I slept in an hour longer than I planned. I am in the process of sending it to historian and fieari. I also sent it to Zoatebix last night even though I didn't get an email from you mate.

 

[Upper_Krust]

Hi all!

Just to let you know that I updated the website with the cover image. Yes it appears I can now update my website...clearly all the stars are falling into the proper alignment at just the right time!

 

[Cheiromancer]

...clearly all the stars are falling into the proper alignment at just the right time!

The forces of DUKC are, as we speak, rallying for a last-ditch attempt to delay the release of the IH. Be warned!

 

[historian]

Hey U_K!

The beta rocks!

I like the subtle variations in the design parameters (those that I mentioned in my e-mail) of some of the higher powered stuff. Aside from making it easier to stat, I feel like it has the effect of balancing certain artifacts (like the Akalich's Robes for instance).

You were also right about the Neutronium Golem and First Choir being a "tad" tougher.

Bear in mind I've only scanned the material, but the only ability(s) that I didn't fully wrap my head aroung were the Nexus Dragon's "Luck" and "Unknowing" abilities. My question here related to the math. As I read them, these abilities would be more powerful in younger as opposed to older dragons.

This is probably a reflection of my reading comprehension moreso than anything else though.

Great work dude, and I'm sure all the posters here will appreciate the dedications!

 

[Fieari]

Copyedit Nitpicks as I read:

--Amidah Section--

*Alabaster description: "They led an unholy crusade that eventually even embroiled several deities. Alabasters first taste for god-slaying." This should be one sentence, not two. Try using a semicolon instead of a period.

(I -love- the Three Weapon Fighting Style feat chain, by the way. Awesome.)

*Typo: "Omnicompetant (Ex): Alabaster know all skills and have maximum ranks in all skills." Should be "knows".

*Steel Hydra: "Powers: This weapon has a +88 everdancing, sonic blast longsword" should be, "This weapon is a +88..." etc. You could also put a period after "sonic blast longsword" instead of the comma, then begin the next peice of information about the sword as a new sentence, and it might read better to add the definite article before each new ability described ("It always acts..., it doubles the..., and upon scoring a...")

*Were-sword: "...both the opponents and the wielders." should be "...both the opponent's and the wielder's."

(The Undersword is wicked, by the way. Very cool!)

*"The amidah template does not stack with the Paragon template instead overlapping." this is awkward. Try "The amidah template overlaps with the Paragon template instead of stacking."

*"Tha amidah always have maximum hit points per Hit Die." should be "The amidah always has..."

*"The amidahs speed increases..." should be "The amidah's speed increases..."

*"Amidah can only be struck..." might be better as "The amidah can only be struck..."