Converting Monsters from Polyhedron Magazine

[Shade]

Very nice! My only concern is with the greater version doing "full eyebite". The original writeup only allowed for sickening. The comatose option vs. creatures of 4 or less HD seems a bit much for a 5 HD creature! How about we simplify it to a sickening gaze?

 

[freyar]

Yeah, a 6th level spell is kind of a lot. But then the sickening gaze is only a touch more powerful than the regular enfeebling gaze. Is that enough?

 

[Shade]

I'd be OK with the rest of eyebite, just not the coma.

 

[Cleon]

I'd be OK with the rest of eyebite, just not the coma.

How about a few rounds of nauseated instead of the eyebite's hours of coma?

 

[freyar]

How about a few rounds of nauseated instead of the eyebite's hours of coma?

That'd work for me. 1d6 rounds? Then the full duration for the panicked and sickened part.

 

[Cleon]

That'd work for me. 1d6 rounds? Then the full duration for the panicked and sickened part.

Sounds good.

 

[Shade]

Like so?

Biting Gaze? (Su): Three times per day, a greater bereginya can strike a single opponent with waves of evil power just by looking onto his or her eyes. This is similar to a gaze attack, except that the bereginya must use a standard action, and those merely looking at it are not affected. Whoever the bereginya targets must succeed on a DC X Fort save or be affected as though by an eyebite spell (caster level equals greater bereginya's HD), except victims are nauseated for 1d6 rounds rather than rendered comatose. The ability has a range of 30 feet. The save DC is Charisma-based.

 

[Cleon]

Like so?

Biting Gaze? (Su): Three times per day, a greater bereginya can strike a single opponent with waves of evil power just by looking onto his or her eyes. This is similar to a gaze attack, except that the bereginya must use a standard action, and those merely looking at it are not affected. Whoever the bereginya targets must succeed on a DC X Fort save or be affected as though by an eyebite spell (caster level equals greater bereginya's HD), except victims are nauseated for 1d6 rounds rather than rendered comatose. The ability has a range of 30 feet. The save DC is Charisma-based.

I'm tempted to just list all the effects and drop the reference to eyebite, it'll save the DM having to look it up. I'd fix the duration too, like too make it easier. Something like:

Biting Gaze (Su): Three times per day, a greater bereginya can strike a single opponent with waves of evil power just by looking onto his or her eyes. This is similar to a gaze attack with a range of 30 feet, except that the bereginya must use a standard action, and those merely looking at it are not affected. Whoever the bereginya targets must succeed on a DC X Fort save or be affected: an opponent with 4 or fewer hit dice is panicked and sickened for an hour, as well as nauseated for 1d6 rounds; an opponent with 5 to 9 hit dice is panicked and sickened for an hour; and an opponent with 10 or more HD is sickened for an hour. The save DC is Charisma-based.

 

[Shade]

That's fine with me.

 

[Cleon]

That's fine with me.

Good!

Why don't you start a Greater Bereginya in homebrews with that Biting Gaze SA and then we can finish off the standard Bereginya?

Weapon Focus, Stealthy or Improved Initiative for the regular Bereginya's other feat?

2 ranks apiece in Hide, Move Silently and Spot?

Challenge Rating 1 since they're about as nasty as Ghouls?