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[Voadam]

Villains poisoning the well of Morrus's community is kind of an interesting metaphor.

 

[Faolyn]

Okay, besides the reference to Morrus, what's the relevance of the other highlighted sections? Are they dog-whistles somehow?

I think the poisoning/cursing the well for demons is one? It could just be a standard evil trope, though (although it may be a trope that originated in anti-semetic myths).

 

[Dannyalcatraz]

“I have a plan. First, we find the village dump and set it on fire. Then, we use the fire as a fundraiser...”

”Then?”

”That’s it.”

”What about saving the village?”

”Our followers will do that.”

Confused looking around

”Ummm…what followers?”

”The ones we get during the fundraiser.”

 

[bennet]

Congratulations, I can't think of a bigger compliment, its like being a boyfriend in a Taylor Swift song.

Well, the writing is above their usual level, but it's still pretty bad.

I would like the in depth analysis, so I can see if my adventures are pretty bad too. Maybe I can learn something.

 

[Voadam]

Okay, besides the reference to Morrus, what's the relevance of the other highlighted sections? Are they dog-whistles somehow?

Not sure at all.

Red Hand Cult? I got nothing.

Abaddon is often a D&D devil or demon based loosely off the Book of Revelations' Abaddon leader of tormenting locust things who torment those without the seal of God.

 

[Quartz]

what's the relevance of the other highlighted sections?

Red Hand of Doom.

Red Hand of Doom - Wikipedia

en.wikipedia.org

Abaddon the Despoiler is a major WH40K villain.

'Prison deep in the depths of the Underdark' sounds like the location of a Balrog from LOTR.

 

[Mind of tempest]

Well, I think Snarf the Bard might bite it first, but it's going to be hard to kill Oofta the Smith and Lanefan the Stoic. Unless Oofta's an elf...

both are clearly dwarves, snarf I have no idea on.

 

[aco175]

Villains poisoning the well of Morrus's community is kind of an interesting metaphor.

A bit passive-aggressive are they. Unless we believe in coincidences.

 

[Maxperson]

I would like the in depth analysis, so I can see if my adventures are pretty bad too. Maybe I can learn something.

1. "In a small village, in an obscure kingdom..." There shouldn't be a comma in between village and in.
2. "This horrible curse is sickening the inhabitants until they finally die." is written poorly. "This horrible curse is causing the inhabitants to sicken and die."
3. "...and your companions are brave, and hunger..." doesn't need that comma.
4. "While traveling among the Realms..." Realms shouldn't be capitalized unless it's referring to a specific name like the Forgotten Realms. They may have been referring to a proper name, but with their track history...
5. "...and seek a small Inn to find rest in." Inn should not be capitalized there and the last "in" just sounds funky. Leave it off.
6. "However soon after arriving..." There should be a comma after however.
7. "...this curse, and at the same time save the world even from possible doom." You don't need the comma between curse and and. Further, the word "even" shouldn't be in that sentence. It should just be, "..save the world from possible doom." Not that level 1-2 PCs should be saving the world in any case, but that's a different issue.
8. "The Cult of Abaddon is an adventure written for a small party of 4 for levels 1 to 2..." That makes my head hurt. "The Cult of Abaddon is an adventure written for 4 adventurers of levels 1-2..."

 

[bennet]

Abaddon is often a D&D devil or demon based loosely off the Book of Revelations'