Ok, let me try this again for you. I'll try and edit out any superflous material. I personally feel this makes for painful reading (of course the above may be painful as well), but how about this?
Name: Tobias Danior
Race: Human
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Appearance: He stands at 5’10 with a lean body. His head is topped by closely cropped black hair. He has a slightly pointed nose, a wry grin, and green eyes. His skin is a deep tan.
His clothing is simple. He favors earth tones in his clothes, nothing terribly bright, but practical. Simple brown boots that lace up slightly over his ankles. Plain brown pants that are held up by a worn leather cord. Strapped to the cord is a beat-up sheath that holds a rather plain rapier. A slightly lighter brown tunic with sleeves that hang loosely over his wrists.
Picture: Tobias is a storyteller that uses magic to create illusions to illustrate his stories. I would love to see him sitting down with a smile on his face and his hands spread or cupped with a floating image between them as if he was telling a tale or just practicing. The magic is based around manipulating light so any light effects that you would want to add would be interesting.
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Name: Garren Renier
Race: Human, but has been magically altered
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Appearance: Garren is 6’10 feet (around 2.1 meters) and for all intents and purposes appears as a seamless suit of armor. His head looks like a helm with a long narrow, black void for his eyes and a square indentation with four holes where his mouth would be. His body as a whole has the defining look of muscles without the real detail of skin. His form appears masculine in build, but has no distinctly male parts. His feet do not have individual digits, but appear as a solid boot. He has taken to wearing a rather large, gray wool cloak. While it doesn’t completely hide his appearance, it does give enough cover to allow the illusion of a knight in armor. He wears his sword and kite shield strapped on his back over the cloak.
I will skip the background as it isn't vital. Both characters can be found at
www.quentriandal.com if you would like more info.
Picture: This was an attempt to create a different take on the knight and shining armor stereotype. Feel free to touch up the details slightly (give the helm your own feel, tatter the cloak,). The key here is that he shouldn't be ornate or heavily detailed. A hybrid type challenge for the artists I suppose. The key features are the void strip for his eyes and the indentation (I'm not married to a straight square there if you can add something dynamic to it without becoming to ornate) with four holes.
